Okay. Well written and 'staring at the car crash as you drive by' interesting. However, it will be disappointing and problematic if you plan to use bdsm as an excuse for nonconsent torture. Your story is, of course, yours to write as you wish. Consider proper category and labeling of future chapters. Realize that clear tagging is important, but that tags are placed after the story and often not seen by readers. An additional author note at the start of chapters is helpful to many readers and can cut down on negative responses.
Look forward to your future chapters.
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Anonymous12/27/13
Promising start
Like it so far. Good setup. Can't wait for the action.
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Welcome new author
Okay. Well written and 'staring at the car crash as you drive by' interesting. However, it will be disappointing and problematic if you plan to use bdsm as an excuse for nonconsent torture. Your story is, of course, yours to write as you wish. Consider proper category and labeling of future chapters. Realize that clear tagging is important, but that tags are placed after the story and often not seen by readers. An additional author note at the start of chapters is helpful to many readers and can cut down on negative responses.
Look forward to your future chapters.
Promising start
Like it so far. Good setup. Can't wait for the action.
Hmm
Different
Interesting but different
next chapter
i hope the next chapter is coming soon i wanna know who the sub will be
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