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by LWeaver12/30/13

Very Good

But you should fix your use of punctuation. For example, wrap direct dialogue in quotation marks.
Still hot though!

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by FA_JF12/30/13

Nicely done, newbie

Tight and fast. ;)

Previous comment has a point about using quotation marks for dialogue. However, a well used exception can create something unique. You've put us in her headspace. We experience this with her as much as watch it happen. Not separating the dialogue contributes to that feeling.

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by mindventure01/03/14

Nice Work

I liked your story a lot - five stars worth. I also like the writing style. Cormac McCarthy has made a fantastic living writing with little punctuation and no quotation marks.

Please keep submitting stories. You have talent. I'll look for your work in the future.

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