You Couldn't Handle Me Ch. 08

Great payoff

Great story - I was checking every night to see if you'd posted the next installment - and when I saw the final chapter was up I couldn't resist. Really well written, and the best erotic story I've ever read. I'll definitely keep looking for more of your stuff. For me, I have no doubt you have a great talent for this writing, I hope you enjoyed writing it.

Sad

This story was so amazing.I can't believe part 8 came up so soon.I check every single second of the day to see if your story was updated and I was so happy to see that part 8 was up.I will definitely read this story again and again and I will be do sad that it has ended. 😭

17 pages, really????

17 pages, really???? Was more like a street fight than incest. Can't believe I read it all.

AWESOME!!!!

Big time fan of all your stories, but this story might just be my favorite, it was AWESOME from start to finish. The buildup from Ch1 to Ch8 had me clicking refresh everyday in anticipation of the next update. You are a gifted writer, and you keep getting better and better. keep up the good work, and I will definitely keep reading!

Really

Grow up giant tits and giant cock and a dumb story line. You got a one if I could give less I would. I wouldn't want to handle either one and I wouldn't try this is so boring you should delete all 8 chapters and save the space.

Great story

But extremely disappointed in how it turned out. Still, overall I thought it was written very well and now has me reviewing your other series.

sadly totally predictable.

like I said your stories are very predictable. sure some parts are sexy but to be honest who needs to read them to know how its going to end.. im a breasts man but damn if I saw his mom I wouldn't be able to stop myself from laughing.. bc I would wonder how she doesn't knock herself out with those insanely huge breasts. sorry your story held such promise and in the end you failed to deliver. but in any case I guess that just goes to show your characters are all surface they have no depth to them..

hm...

It's kind of all the same formula, isn't it? The characters change, there are tiny modifications to the end or middle, but it always finishes in the same way: the good person is shut out. I remember the author saying that he likes it when evil wins, but if evil can only win in the same way every single time, it just gets a bit dull.

Write what you know, I suppose, even if it's totally predictable. And anyway, its not like the anonymous comments ever really get taken to heart.

Fantastic

Great story, loved it....

*

I admit I didn't make it very far. The author's voice was off-putting to me. He sounds like an arrogant, foul-mouthed jerk. He begins by confessing what a selfish son of a bitch he's been pretty much all through his life and we are meant to believe that new insight has taught him the error of his ways. But he continues in the same vein. It's hard to change one's psychological make-up. Very hard. This dumb story is an illustration of that.

Good writing - but too long

Like an artist with a painting - you need to know when to stop. This was way too long for me.

writing for the sake of writing

words followed by more words, followed by even more words, saying nothing.
could have said it all in 3 pages and had more meaning. There was so much repetition and rambling it became boring drivel.

a m a z i n g

only halfway through the finale and HAD to stop and say you're my hero!! ...ok, ok..and I also stopped to refuel my energy! ha!!

If I had one critique, it is that your talent would be well served with an editor...apart from that, you, sir talkman, are altogether yummmmy! I really enjoy how well you portray the distinct personalities with each character taking turn as narrator!

enough with the accolades, I gotta get back to it!!!
THANKS FOR YOUR CONTRIBUTION!!!

Make another or continue

Make another story or continue on this one! Great job

17 pages?

This isn't Ribald Classics homie. 1 star.

Dull, and seemingly endless

In fact, endlessly dull. I tried to like this whole farrago, I made an honest effort, truly, but by the time I got to the end I really, really wondered why I'd bothered. It was just words, yak, yak, yak, blah, blah, blah, just noise on the page, like the teacher in 'Charlie Brown', and I stopped hearing anything except the voice in my head telling me that stupefying dullness has a life, and it is here. 17 pages to be as grindingly dull as this? you sir have a real ego problem, please find another medium to purvey your brand of ego-driven, runny ass-gravy, your writing has given me nothing except an overwhelming desire to never see your name in print ever again. No stars.

disappointed. .

I stuck with this story from the start and it has ended very disappointingly... The dull talk during sex, the constant sizing each other up, n the mom getting pregnant, made for a very very very borin final chapter. I didn't even get an erection dude!
The early chapters were amazing.but this was far from it.i frankly wanted jay or carmen to just shoot both of them at the end.
I hope you finishes your stories better next time. Like tom ending up with carmen!
I know you don't care about my opinion.but, LOVE BEATS LUST all the time!

An interesting combination

Part of me loves this story and part of me says "hm..." On the plus side, you can write plenty and provide tons of detail, something other writers can have trouble with; a few others even leave critical details out. You don't suffer from either problem. Be sure to keep those positives in your favor. :)

On the not-so-great side, while all stories don't have to have happy endings nor be perfectly gentlemanly nor ladylike, too much "nasty" can spoil things. There's also the obvious 10 inches and FF cup size that aren't normal when a normal guy is lucky to have 5-6 and the normal woman, a 32-36B. To have that much stamina on both sides? Even the best porn stars couldn't do it.

In all, find a more realistic balance. Don't make the guy out to be the Adonis and the woman beyond a foul-mouthed Aphrodite. They can both be in great shape, but bring it back down to Earth. They can realistically be nasty, forceful and crude on occasion, but it won't win people over if it's too long with too much arrogance and nastiness. You've got some great tools, so just find a way to even it all out.

FABULOUS STORY..................

BEST I'VE EVER READ AND THE PERFECT ENDING.

TOM LIVED THE DREAM I NEVER HAD.............WONDERFUL STORY........

Damn hot story

I don't even like to read and yet I found myself checking in for the next part very frequently. Hotter than hell!!!

Amazing

I loved reading this story so much it was extremly hot

Dog crap ending.

Good write, Dog crap ending. The boy might have big balls, but no manly balls.

I like it

I loved the nastiness, I love the filth. Which is probably why I like most of your other stories as well.
in a lot of stories i admit I hate the over-exaggeration of the characters bodies. But for some reason I enjoyed it in your story.
Also something that I don't think got enough good attentions was that Tanya stayed faithful to her husband for 20 years.
I dislike stories where the protagonist shares his women with others even in the past tense. I'm weird like that.
I also think it adds to the chemistry between the Tanya and her son.
Thank you and keep it up!!

Great love it write more loved when he made love to his mothers bf then his mother great great story

Amazing, but sad it had to end.

Thanks for an awesome series, i loved it all the way through, i always prefer story ridden stories over shitty 1-4 page stroke stories any day. It had kept my interest all the way through, can't wait for any more stories of yours in the future!

Ending

So we will never know the fate of Tom and his conscience.

You're getting a lot of negative feedback, and I think one part of it is inaccurate---while Tom gave in, he did win the sexual "battle" and become dominant, which never happens in your stories. In your stories the man always loses to the "evil" woman, so I give you credit for at least presenting a variation on that. And your ideas are excellent if repetitive (okay, except for getting the mother pregnant, not into that). However...you don't need to say the same things 20 times in a row. This could have been half the length and still been as hot. I hate to be critical when your writing has some very hot ideas, but you do ramble.

I was hoping Tom would get turned into a blubbering mess, although I guess Tanya did win in the end. Looking forward to your future stories.

Unbelievable

What an unbelievable story and ending. Cant wait for the next story.
Heres to more Mom and son incest. More pregnancies and perhaps
a marriage or two to Mom

Terrible ending

You had built up an amazing story one man trying to redeem himself he won over his mom and then you throw it all away. He could had rode off with Carmen who gou screwed over plus his dad who wasn't a jerk and cared for his family. You had the cjance to make him a better man and you blew it. I enjoyed the story up till the end I wish it had went the other way.

Could have made Tom shoulder some Responsibility

Pure carnage nothing sensible

94% aka 16/17ths of a great conclusion to a great story !

Most of this was epic, the smacking of Mom's ass, the smack talk , even Tom & Tonya's conclusion wasn't out of line given these characters' wherewithals. This was akin to marathon piano recital by world class concert pianist that ended on three, incongruous, flat notes.

The trio of goofs would be excluding details of Casey's returrn to carnal stage along with more specifics on lJay & Carmen's fates. Some eventual consolation would not have been out of line. Still the superb FAR outweighs the mediocre. This story isn't for everybody - so what. I

If one has no ribald sense of humor or distaste for details. Stay the f---k away. This author dares to toy with some heavy questions in the midst of body fluids & groans of ectasy rebounding off walls. He doesn't opt for crowd pleasing answers.

There are victims left to cast a shadow over readers enjoyment of vivid, unbridled debauchery. No one gets a complete free pass as curtain falls. Previous cmemts cplain this was too long. Too me, this wasn't long emough. I'd LOVE IT., as mentioned before to see Carmen & Jay heal but oh well.

The main thing seem by me, is how above & beyond TalkMan went beyond your average story in this genre. Does he talk smack through his demented characters on a voracious & incessant scale ? Yeah. But he backs it all up ( & then some ) *****.

Different

Yeah there was a lot of repetition, but if reality is what some are looking for then isn't it more realistic that these characters would think like this? Constantly at battle with their own wills. And while that may be realistic I think its important to keep in mind that this is fiction, it can have cartoonish events and bodies.

This author basically writes the opposite sex stories of which the male is dominant. How many stories and authors are on here where the male has a 12-13 inch dick and conquers married woman after married woman? Too many to count. This is the opposite idea. And I like it more since it can focus on more than one body part being used as irresistible.

Also, the author deserves credit for having the male win this time. He wasn't completely corrupted, he actually tried to keep his relationship with Carmen in tact. But just like in the last chapter, he knew that his mother and his own sex drive would not be denied. This story is a tragedy, where the evil parts of good people win out and the good ones either escape, like Carmen, or are left in their wake, like Jay.

And in response to the comment that 'love beats lust all the time", uh, no it doesn't. Wish that was true but you know its not. Love could win, at first, but while it may not be the reason people divorce every time, more than 50% of marriages in the U.S. do not have happy endings, with many involving adultery. You should stick to Disney movies dude and not read erotic stories, especially about incest.

Great Stuff (but crap too..)

Pure Brilliance from start till after Sex with Mom. Then it all started to go downhill.
2 things;


First off, Jay should have thrown Tanya out on her cheating ass. Don't care if the world knew why. She's lazy, artificial, amoral, a liability, a leech & will never make it on her own. Total Bitches like her I've known & I really do enjoy it when they get theirs. But lets face it, Jay wimped out on this & he'll find he's gonna be more hurt & pay much more for not doing what he needed to do - cutting his losses. He makes the money while Tanya & loser son eat it? Fuck that.

This is fantasy-writing I know, but to the real world me that really blows.


2nd, Tom. Bold. Smart. Great guy. Piss-poor judgement. Now a total Zero. Had a good future but flushed it all down the "dark" toilet. And for what? Sure, Tanya has a great bod now (yay!), but how long's that gonna last? She's FORTY-TWO for fuck's sake! Total asswipe now. Yes, I would have fucked Tanya too - then moved on with my life. Tanya's the End - & now Tom's life has ended too. The dumb fuck.


Poor Carmen. Damaged for other men to follow. But a commonplace experience for a lot of women today. No more trust, dammit!!!!


Whatever. Good story TTM. Almost worth the investment. Ending.....not so good. But don't let that stop you. Keep going man. You've got a fan.

- spec

grammar

Liked the story. Hated the grammar. It's not me and her. It's she and I. The person talking (or writing) you are always the second person mentioned. You really need to learn this rather basic grammar, when to use him, her or me as opposed to he, she or I.

maybe

Ok, maybe I was wrong in saying love beats lust ALL the time. But there's nothing wrong in rooting for it is there? For a guy who's totally in love I have to believe that.
N I did say it was an awesome series.i was just let down by the conclusion.

Good story, abrreviated ending

I liked the story. It is fiction and it is fine that things are inflated. Pun intended. Good job of getting me invested in the characters. I wish you had explored the relationship between Jay and Tanya more. The conversation at the pool is missing the kind of heat I would have expected from Jay after being emotionally destroyed by his wife and son. This is a good man that has been punishing himself for 20 years just like his wife. I am not sure I believe he would have taken the new reality of his life without more action.

Kind of disappointed

I gotta admit, this is nowhere near as good as it should have been.

great

Just thought you would make cantankerous his wife n mother his slut

Thanks For The Great Read. No Doubt that Tanya was/is a True Bitch Slut and she deserved to Finally be Conquered by Someone, especially Her Son. As For Jay, He Always knew that He was not a capable Partner in the Bedroom (at least for Tanya) so what happened wasn't really a surprise to him as He knew that eventually she was going to have to cheat on him, so his only surprise was the fact that it was his Son!! I felt bad for Carmen, as I think she was good for Tom, and in real life, she deserved better, but this is just erotic fiction, soooo~~Shit Happens!!
Tom at least finally wised up and returned to College so he might make something of himself after all, But Why worry when He can have fantastic Mind Blowing Sex several times per day and not worry about how the bills get paid (Once again, this id Fantasy, not Reality, hehe)

Loved it

Finally a mother/son story that has it all. The only thing I would change is the meanness to others. Just because you have this fantasy couple that are the ultimate incest freaks, why do they have to be dickheads? I would have liked it more if they were kind. If they had a sense of guilt - not for enjoying each other sexually - but for causing pain to others. The hottest thing would be the ultimate alphas glory in the incest, be each others true love, perfect match, and still be decent human beings. Is that too much to ask? This is after all total bullshit fantasy why not make it perfect.

u r great

Just thought you would make carmen his wife n mother his slut

I was surprised by how well this ended, i was expecting not to like it so much. The dad was in the story so little i don't think it mattered as much the way it ended for him, the only thing i would have changed was after he tamed Tanya that he would have kept his gf too and had best of both worlds. Tanya wouldn't complain since he is in charge and im sure the gf could have been made to accept the mother, Owe yeh and the teacher being more in this chapter than just showing up in pictures. The only additions i would make.
I thought the build up would have been better than the actual act but the last chapter was just as hot as the previous ones.

No different

You said was different then other stories but was the same other then the dumbass kid who lost thought he won. And you just jumped from him winning to suddenly they're fucking again and Carmen walked in on it. It was so out of nowhere thought was a stupid dream again. You should retire stop writing stories cause you went 8 chapters and told same story you tell in one chapter but dragged it out for no reason and made it worse. Need to learn sometimes less is more jackass

Good read...

In my opinion I though you did a great job with this story...the pool chair scene I thought was freakin amazing and the build up was epic...although I'm a fan of the subject matter, don't care much for pregnancy pertaining to this subject matter...having said all that, I still thought it was a great job...

Bravo sir...

Well done, a tab long winded towards the end. Never the less good stuff. If anyone enjoyed this story, you would love Klrxo's work. I highly recommend "how mom made me state champ" ; "the nest" and "5th wheel" to name a few...

About Matters

Listen, the ending was great, don't get me wrong. Kinky and hot. But one mistake you made, as much as I enjoyed the story, was making us sympathize with the dad. You see, while the dad's role in this story is filled by the role of a cuckold obviously; this tale is of two sex gods finding intimacy, and leaving a loose end like that seems kinda hasty. The dad just "spaces out". So work on tying up loose ends, otherwise: Good job!

A Change from you'r usual endings. But still true to your style

Great Story - Your best yet
This is the 1st story of yours where the woman doesn't make the guy submit or fool him. Tom has no illusions about the nature of their relationship & he is just as bad as Tanya. Also, the first time that both stand on equal grounds. They both ultimately got what they deserved & both cheated on their significant others.

On the other hand, like in your usual stories the guy resists at first, but then gives in to his desires & once he's tasted the best, there's no going back. Also, the alpha female takes initiative & pleasure destroying the relationships.

But this time the woman also resists at some level 1st & the guy lusted after her 1st. To top it all off the guy enjoyed the destruction of the weaker/normal characters too. Rather than being corrupted, it seem Tom underwent the realization Tanya had undergone when she was his age. They were truly meant for each other.

Hope you write more such stories with both sides being equally dark. It's a lot hotter.

Great Reading

This has been an amazing series. This story has captured it's readers like no other on this site. Just look at the amount of feedback it has generated. You are a talented author and I have truly enjoyed reading this story. I would not have ended it the way you did but it is your story not mine. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Definitely not the classic happy ending.

Great job. Reminds me a bit of the Japanese/netorare. It rarely appeals to most people, but its still good in its own way.

I look forward to more of your work, this series still could go on imo. Thanks!