Night Out

Nice rough draft

A good beginning to your story but please learn to proofread before you submit something to Literotica. It detracts from a very good story all of the spelling and mechanical errors. Maybe you should find someone to edit for you.

Good start

You've got my interest, keep going.

Really good start - it's got all the makings of a classic cuck tale. Part two soon please!

Ah, the amarillo sour...

... my second-favorite drink after the lubbock iced tea.

Cuckold willing to submit.

Now, will girlfriend have other surprises for cuckold? Make cuckold strip? Make cuckold strip the stud? Make cuckold suck the studs cock as he kisses and feels up gf? Have cuckold clean cock and pussy? We need part two.

Need to Proofread before submitting

Why can't you see that there is something (actually a *lot* of things) wrong with this sentence?

"Slowly I strip out of my closes you watch as I do exclaiming "yell" when you see my penis all locked up."

BF sleeps over? NOT LW!

They live in different apartments? And Sweetie has him in a cage ALREADY? I am willing to acknowledge COMMITTED couples as Hubby & Sweetie, but NOT BF/GF relationships like this. Further, a female student developing a cuck (esp. a CAGED cuck) out of a male student makes almost NO sense, unless he's a (very sicko) Rockefeller heir!

Yeah, and a story about college students should actually meet (at least a few) 'word mechanic' standards!

Unrated.

Apologies

This (CH1) is posted in Fetish. Great posting!

CH2, however, is posted under LW! I read this chapter to catch up on a previously unread series, thinking (erroneously) that ALL chapters would be posted in THE SAME category, as they SHOULD be! I will repeat my objection under Ch2, assuming the couple don't change their living arrangements by then!