Love the story! Keep up the work! Just add a bit more detail, make the story longer, and add more description of how the girls look, the location of the puddles and the actions, ect. You have the storyline , just needs fine tubing! Great job
Good, believable story and very nicely written. And a turn on too!
Very nice, as previous comment, could do with a bit more detail, but very well, and conscientiously written. Thank you.
Good story, Steve.
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