by steve25805
Love the story! Keep up the work! Just add a bit more detail, make the story longer, and add more description of how the girls look, the location of the puddles and the actions, ect. You have the storyline , just needs fine tubing! Great job
Good, believable story and very nicely written. And a turn on too!
Very nice, as previous comment, could do with a bit more detail, but very well, and conscientiously written. Thank you.
I think this is a very nice story, certainly for piss-fetishists. Bit still one thing remains for me disappointing. The story tells the discovery by Heidi of the pissing act of Katie. But why are the two other girls (Deborah and Sarah) not also involved in the fetish of pissing in the house after the act was discovered? Apparently, Katie was well in for it. So once the secret was reveiled, there should be no inhibitions for the other two girls to participate in the joy of pissing. That would have made the story more exciting.
make more stories like these peeing everywhere its so freaking hot and sexy wish more stories like this !