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by greenmountaineer01/04/14

The male equivalent of the "female scorned." I like the fractured grammar of the ending in the first stanza and beginning of the second; felt visceral; wish it continued through the rest of the poem until the last last line, which, as it was, was a passive voice "said and done," until a scornful, active definitive one.

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by UnderYourSpell01/05/14

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A tritina yes? and a good one at that, where the repetitions don't crowd out or detract from the poignancy of the poem

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by Koba01/05/14

I liked this! The last line packs quite a punch after a bit of equivocating in the first stanzas. Very effective. Well done!

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by Ashesh901/05/14

Well said ,

Rem !

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by pelegrino01/05/14

I agree and sympathize with the sentiments expressed, but empty hearts don't break.
Five, nevertheless!

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