The Alpha Males Ch. 01

You need an editor

This is a good idea but you really need to edit your work. I mean at first the captain was a girl, then she turn into a he, then he turned back into a woman. Also make it longer, I want to be able to vote for your story.

Great start. I read the prelude thought the story was dead. Again, you could use a editor but not at the expense of another next chapter. I hope we don't have to wait long for another chapter.

I love the idea of an entire universe of technologically advanced matriarchy of women being overthrown by a single male by raw male sexuality.

Nice start

I really enjoyed your story.

Editor, or at least revise your work

I got the slight impression that men dont exist in the same civilization as this ship except for the Alpha. Which is interesting and any other chapters you write you should clarify that if I am right.