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Thanks for the feedback.
I appreciate most of the feedback I got on this story, good and bad. I made certain choices, including leaving out certain details, for a variety of reasons. For some of you that worked, for others it didn't. I thought the theme of the story was forgiveness and death as the ultimate separation. I figured if readers filled in their own blanks, it would be more personal to them and have a bigger impact. HarryVag is confused of course: no mention of wife cutting hubby off or sleeping with his brother in this story. I think he read too much of his own life into this tale. Ahhh...feeding the trolls. Thanks for reading!
Wow
Here I am, a mountain man that lives out in the sticks, with satellite internet and a generator and when I finished reading this story, I'll be damned if I didn't burst into tears.
All I can say is well done, Author. Well done.
Oh yes...and yes!
Oh yes! Harry reads too many of these things and then he gets them confused. Maybe he has Alzheimer's?
And yes! This was a heartbreaker. To be sure, I didn't suspect anything until we reached the end. I'm reminded of the old Vern Gosden song; there was a line, "You don't know about lonely, till it's chiseled in stone."
Good little story...sad. Certainly worth the five stars.
Good Read
Thanks for the short heart felt story. Didn't expect the end though I was wondering why it was all a one-sided conversation.
Meanings
Maya means illusion or delusion.
Might help you in determining the point of this piece... which seems to me to be to tweak Loving Wives assumptions.
And HIV chimes in to reinforce the point.
Green-something
(as for "he" I thought that was the weakest point - probably a doctor, maybe a priest - in any event, husband was not the point of comfort in extremis. Common, unfortunately. An implied affair? Not likely, since there was no time. Speaking of which, she was 11 days short of 28 years old, and the time of the story was 4 days before it was posted - i.e. "today". )
A LOT OF UNANSWERED QUESTIONS
or maybe unasked. TK U MLJ LV NV
Re; blah
Good story, he needed the release/ As for you blah, perhaps you should go back to your Winnie the Pooh books and happy meal toy. You don't seem to be mature enough to be here.
Too many holes...
Your redirect had far too many false holes... what was the other man? why would you state that she hadn't spend much time with daughter in five years, if she was dead? Editing a story is NOT just about spelling and grammar... the MOST important editing is whether the story's plot works
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