Annie Rides the Sybian Ch. 01

Yay!!!

I'm definitely loving it so far hon. Love the Annie in the story, love that she's got to experience what I would still love to (is it weird that I'm jealous of a character inspired by me), and love that you found so far the right balance of eroticism based on our convo. Can't wait for more!

Curiosity killed the cat

When Annie took that first step into Marcus' locked room, she sealed her fate.

Yeah, she enjoyed her Sybian rides, but she's going to pay for all those orgasms--big time. Will she see herself on the Internet? What will Marcus want from her? Who will be watching her the next time she rides the Sybian?

Looking forward to future chapters to find out. Thanks for posting.

i have read better. I still think its a Good story tho. Love the end btw. ;)

New slave

She never new the cameras were there! He didn't care! With the parents next door and the daughter frt a week on his sybian! She is his to use and abuse to both of their hearts desires! Lucky Guy! His expertise will make a slave to envy, train an sell for BIG bucks!

Wow.. I have always wanted to ride a sybian! This is an awesome read!

Ride Annie Ride

I kind of figured out the ending before I got to it. I would love to see that video made to the story that was well told by Goldeniangel. My two fav writers in the same story, that dosnt happen very often. Great job.

It was obvious what was going to happen in the first few paragraphs

you gave to much away and over used the word creepy and ewwie icky? childish words, the guy was a werido to your character, he may have given her the creeps, but not enough to keep her away from the money or machine, use other words

To Anonymous:

No.

making the ' ick factor ' tangible and borderline hot ?

Well played !

Because she was deaf, dumb and blind?

And couldn't POSSIBLY think she was being setup? It might have been an okay story if it hadn't been so blatantly obvious what was going to happen. And you could use a better vocabulary.

5 stars!

Excellent story, and too TOO hot!

THESE RIDES LAST LONGER THAN 8 SECONDS

and there are no pick-up riders, but plenty of clowns and flash bulbs. TK U MLJ LV NV

NICE

I was wondering how she would get caught. Nicely played.

very hot

Awesome!

I wondered about that, I figured there had to be some. Well done