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A Married Travel Agents Cruise

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous01/23/14

what a skank!

First Iceland, now a cruise. But now she would dump her lover's brat on her unsuspecting hubby. And no shame, no regrets? Yup, definitely a skank!
I obvioulsy did not like this at all...

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by Anonymous01/23/14

What a bore

This story is like a piece of stale bread,staple and bad.

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by Anonymous01/23/14

"It's all yours if you want it baby."

Yuk you sound like a trany on the game, not at all sexy

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by Anonymous01/23/14

My 2 Cents

The reference to never doing anthing behind the husbands' backs was a joke right? She already cheated on him in Iceland. She cheated again and got knocked up - what a slut

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by Anonymous01/23/14

Well that was just an ugly, nasty, poorly written waste of time.

We know she is going to cheat. You make it clear. She has shaved herself. She has stopped on the way to the Ship and purchased sexy clothing so that her husband won't accidentally see her things (although what is she going to do - throw the clothes away before she gets home?). She is masturbating in anticipation of cheating. And then the boring, illicit sex. Yawn. Then, after all her planning we're supposed to believe that she didn't have condoms and wasn't on the pill? Yeah - that works and is SO believable. And then the ultimate lie. A Caucasian woman (This is a stand alone story, so, since we don't know her name and you didn't bother to describe her we make assumptions) is going to get pregnant by a man named Javier (not Caucasian) and pass the baby off to her husband (again we assume he's white like his wife) as his own child? And you don't think that might be a problem? Dear Authors - you're character development is nonexistent. Your storyline is unbelievable, given the lack of reasons or excuses for her behavior. Your dialogue adds nothing to the story. The writing does not flow well and there is nothing compelling about it. You simply don't create any interest and in the end, who cared what happened to her? I gave you a "1". Just a terrible story.

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by Anonymous01/23/14

Really?

Yes, this is an erotic site. But characters have to be somewhat believable unless you are writing in the fantasy category. Here you write about an educated woman who decides to become pregnant with a stranger without any planning or thought about the consequences? Sex maybe, but the preggers is too silly. Readers just cannot relate to your theme, and will rate them low.

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by Anonymous01/23/14

wow!

boring and redundant. seems you have a very limited imagination.

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by Anonymous01/23/14

Right, the husband will never suspect

She’s impregnated by a Cuban named Javier, yet when the baby’s born, the husband won’t be able to able to tell he’s not the father. Bullshit, just like the rest of your story.

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by Anonymous01/25/14

Red Chardonnay???

Red Chardonnay?

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by Anonymous01/26/14

hope the cheating slut get AIDS and her and the baby both die from it

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by Anonymous01/24/15

Excuse me

Javier is Cuban. You painted her like she and her husband were caucasian. I think your husband will notice the difference if the baby is Javier's. Kind of a dumb story that obviously wasn't thought through.

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