Enjoyed the story although it was shorter than I'd like, but it did miss a key component; dialogue. This is the single most important story in my humble opinion that most authors can't seem to remember. The balance between good narration and dialogue. All too often there is too much of one and not enough of another. As a reader I like when the characters say the things you wished others would say, or at the very least you would say, regardless of the story type, drama, comedy, Sci if, or erotica.
Good dialogue or the lack there of can make or break a story.
English
Dialogue?
Your characters aren't speaking at all. It's boring. I wonder if it's possible accomplish something between 2 people without speaking, huh?
Couldn't agree more!!!
Enjoyed the story although it was shorter than I'd like, but it did miss a key component; dialogue. This is the single most important story in my humble opinion that most authors can't seem to remember. The balance between good narration and dialogue. All too often there is too much of one and not enough of another. As a reader I like when the characters say the things you wished others would say, or at the very least you would say, regardless of the story type, drama, comedy, Sci if, or erotica.
Good dialogue or the lack there of can make or break a story.
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