Just Give Me One Good Excuse

short, sweet, to the point, and original

Nice job! 5*

solid but not spectacular tale

The goodbye note was probably best way to handle cheating wife IRL, but that's a bit flat for fiction. The vacuum lie & unveiling of same was quite nicely done however. ****

Very cold and unemotional

I realize it's a short story but certainly there could have been a little heartbreak along the way. The way this is written there doesn't seem to have been any love in the relationship at all and I'm wondering why these two were married at all.

Enjoyed it

...and welcome back.

5*****.

Good story which is between the Revenge and Consequence stories.

And

Short and to the point.....

Nice but too short...

...in my oppinion. It would have been nice had you developed the story further, i.e. her reaction to finding the letter or perhaps some sort of satisfying payback. You didn´t even mention w h y she had olanned to go out - on their anniversary, for christ sake. How did she tell him, how did he react? I´ve git the impression you tried to come to an end.

No Relationship to Lose

The whole story was rather cold. I did not get the feeling that they were all that close. The fact that she was cheating didn't bother me as much as the way they both dealt with it. I don't think either one had invested all that much into the marriage. Still, I would have found out who the other guy was, and made sure that all the parties involved including Rebecca suffered my wrath. After you have been screwed over, it is always good to hurt the people that did it to you in such a way that they will never want to fuck with you again. No, it is not about revenge, it is about standing up for yourself and making sure that it never happens again.

Pretty good for a flash story, thanks.I also hope this means you will be back to writing on a regular basis.

Was she really having an affair? There is no hard evidence so we are left to wonder.

I want to say!

Welcome back!

Liked it, but

It could have used more story development. Thanks for the offering.

Nice

I did need more detail, however. Still a nice flash tale.

OK good start

NOW FINISH THE DAMN STORY.

Interesting solution to a classical problem.

The idea was really different, not the cheating, nor the discovery of the hickey, but rather the explanation presented! And of course the note....

Tanya?

What about Tanya's view on what and why. if it was her first or a string of many.
it would also be nice to see if her and Rebeccas friendship last's

Good Start !

Needs a sequel !

IF YOU CANT CUM UP WITH A PLAUSIBLE TRUTH

create a really atrocious fib, TK U MLJ LV NV

Incomplete

Not really any content.....so pretty boring.

Great job

Loved your story, now I'll have to read the rest, haven't noticed before but now you've got me interested. Bev

5* read

And I agree. A part two/three with Tanya and Rebecca's takes on the situation would be interesting.

So Far So Good

Can't wait for chapter 2

1 star

Really hate these kinds of stories. I come her to get turned on, not read stories of hurt, hate and revenge. Don't care for cuckold stories, especially those with humiliation as a main theme, don't mind hotwife stories, some can be pretty good, but I hate these stories the most. At least this one wasn't too long. Even with that I had to cut it short.

This may be a first

26 comments and not one Anonymous. A good start.

OK

Many stories start like this one does. He knew she had been up to no good but had no real proof of what she had done. She denied having extramarital sex. He guessed she was lying, so he left her. It is incomplete, the reader is left to assume too much.

BTB is OK

But story line and character development just can't be omitted. Just no fun.

I agree with the others it felt very incomplete. What I would worry about is that the real Tanta would welcome the divorce. That is a possible outcome that few readers here would enjoy. It just seems like she isn't really happy and being caught would allow her to better slut around with Rebecca. The only chapter two that would be appealing would be Greg finding the bikini bunch who'll allow him to forget and move on. What's done is done, don't force a farce to accommodate the peanut gallery.

Not bad

Don't let the criticism stop you. This was actually a nice premise for a story. It did, indeed have emotion. The initial deflection and rejection, and subsequent lies evoke some pretty intense emotion. Keep writing, there's some good stories for you to write. Some interesting alternatives to this could be "Let's take a look at Rebecca's magazine article, sounds interesting and maybe we could have some fun with the ideas." When they can't produce the article, the girls would say "Sorry, we looked but Rebecca has already thrown it away. We looked in the stores, but it's already off the shelves. We tried, honey-sorry." Then, he could say "That's OK, darling, you can just give me a demonstration. Since our vacuum cleaner has been out of operation for a year or so, you must have used Rebecca's. We'll go to her house, and you can show me how a woman can masturbate with a vacuum cleaner, and show me how it can give you a hickey. I'm excited, this should be fun, honey!"

Quibbles

I don't like giving up an advantage at the very beginning. Telling her about the hickey was hot-headed and ineffective! But, given that, the story coulda improved, IMHO! After Hubby gets the recall notice, he shoulda put a recorder on the phone-line and caught some of Sweetie's talks with WingLady and the Bull! Let us SEE (at least 'hear') the LW in action!

Miami is warm, but also has year-round roaches and skeeters! Better than lying cheaters, though. Enjoy!

Yawn!!***

Thanks for sharing.

More of this story

I enjoyed this story and I hope you continue it. I hope Greg does find happiness.

Just give me

more story. It was good but it teased me. I liked where it was going.

Ummmm

Where is the rest of the story?

Not finished.

why didn't he just look at her phone log

when she had to run so fast into the shower? Check the caller ID and hit redial.

OK But

Never been a big fan of flash stories. Not a lot of emotional draw. No why or what she did. Kind of like reading a newspaper account of the whole thing.

More please

Enough said

Rest of the Story…?

I agree that the story seems incomplete…!

At least have the "Epilogue" with his "ex"-wife's reaction to the vacuum cleaner, notes, Charge statement, Telephone Bill & his Wedding ring…

No need for a sequel.

Who the hell cares about Cheating Slut's reaction? I sure as fuck don't. Well written and well played.

Keep up the good work.

5 Stars.

Like the old show biz saying..

"Always leave them wanting more"

You did-even though this was a nice quick tale

Thanks for posting again!

Yea ... Leave them guessing is good, but ....

I would have like to know the truth of what Tanya was up to! Why did she start messing around and when Greg left the 2nd time did she even care?

too stupid

She was nervous because I caught her talking to her lover. That was not Rebecca on the phone, it was her lover. It was not even Rebecca's number. I can still see that look of a stranger when she saw me for that instant. I just knew. A husband can just tell.

but he still bought the vacuum story?

SHE SHOULD GET SOME CREDIT FOR

the novelty effect and presentation, TK U MLJ LV NV

From Mrrobbur

Thanks for all the comments! I wrote it as a short story so I didn't add all the usual details. Wanted it short and sweet. Mrrobbur

Who cares why she did it?

The fact is, she did to it and he did the right thing (except for swallowing the big lie they dreamed up. Leave her broke, she can sell the house and take the whole thing, soon she will be broke and come crying for more money. Fuck her - NOT.

good

short and sweet, but for those of us that are vengeance oriented, I sure would like to know if he was able to get back at Tanya and Rebecca, not to exclude the lover boy.

2nd read

the women are worse in Florida.

You're a cheating slut

But if you were honest, it would be okay??? Are you fucking STUPID? What possible difference could it make? You want to live with a whore, but only if she's honest? Personally, I would prefer a big fat lie to catching my wife fucking someone else; but that's just me. Call me crazy.

Great stories but you have a major flaw.

They are in complete. We never get to see the cheaters pain for what she did. These stories are just not satisfying.

Not good

She fucks someone else and gets her friend to lie for her. Hefinds out and then leaves. This story is about as boring as they cone. Not a good effort.