Please do continue the storyline and looking forward to the next chapter
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Anonymous01/22/14
Please continue!
This is such a great story and I can only imagine how much better it will become with future chapters! I'm an older man and love the thought of being with younger girls. I hope Henry ends up having sex with all of the girls and you keep it romantic and take the high road of caring, loving and sharing instead of the low road of jealousy and distrust.
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Anonymous01/22/14
Kee em cummin
Great story, great progression. Please try not to keep us waiting toooooo long. But don't spoil the tale by rush it.
Mny tks.
Like the pace, both of the story and your output of new chapters. You're definitely one of the more interesting writers on here with believable characters. Only criticism I had for this particular chapter was the way you resolved painting yourself into a corner - you had to narrate what happened with the author wasn't present. You say that he found out later, but there's no explanation of how. Plus, even if someone did find out later by a recap from someone who was present, it wouldn't be in such a specific conversational format. But these are just small nitpicks - it really is a great series and much enjoyed.
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Anonymous07/18/14
Love it!
I love the way you write. It's not trashy. It's caring and funny. I love funny! I love the pace.
Thank you!
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Anonymous08/29/14
Great
I love the story. I would honestly prefer if the chapters were a little longer. Just when you start to get into a groove reading it, it ends. But still really good story
But that is not a criticism. I like the sex in stories as much as the next person but, if that is all there is, it soon gets repetitive and boring. Although I hope this will develop into some sexual content at some time, (and I am sure it will), the anticipation is quite a turn on also - as well as developing an interesting story.
English
Nice
Loving this story line , keep it up
Enjoyable
Please do continue the storyline and looking forward to the next chapter
Please continue!
This is such a great story and I can only imagine how much better it will become with future chapters! I'm an older man and love the thought of being with younger girls. I hope Henry ends up having sex with all of the girls and you keep it romantic and take the high road of caring, loving and sharing instead of the low road of jealousy and distrust.
Kee em cummin
Great story, great progression. Please try not to keep us waiting toooooo long. But don't spoil the tale by rush it.
Mny tks.
Intrigued...
Wonderful story line and character build up. Thanks!
Quality, as usual
Like the pace, both of the story and your output of new chapters. You're definitely one of the more interesting writers on here with believable characters. Only criticism I had for this particular chapter was the way you resolved painting yourself into a corner - you had to narrate what happened with the author wasn't present. You say that he found out later, but there's no explanation of how. Plus, even if someone did find out later by a recap from someone who was present, it wouldn't be in such a specific conversational format. But these are just small nitpicks - it really is a great series and much enjoyed.
Love it!
I love the way you write. It's not trashy. It's caring and funny. I love funny! I love the pace.
Thank you!
Great
I love the story. I would honestly prefer if the chapters were a little longer. Just when you start to get into a groove reading it, it ends. But still really good story
You were right about a slow build up
But that is not a criticism. I like the sex in stories as much as the next person but, if that is all there is, it soon gets repetitive and boring. Although I hope this will develop into some sexual content at some time, (and I am sure it will), the anticipation is quite a turn on also - as well as developing an interesting story.
Slipping
off the edge!
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