The Sara Chronicles

Wow

Amazing piece of work.

Couldn't finish it

This was just too fucking long. Who cares how their fucking company is organized (and why don't they use the Internet instead of flying all over the place)?

Sara is a boring character and a boring fuck. Their sex is nothing to get aroused over. And I didn't get aroused, believe me. You spent about ten pages babbling on about MBAs and so on. People with MBAs are ruthless dorks. Listening to their conversation is like eating Grapenuts to a metronome.

Try to write directly without qualifying everything the guy says or thinks with his memories of his completely uninteresting background.

Oh, and it's T-shirt (get it?), not tee shirt.

Goodnight.

Clara in Chicago

Wonderful!

Amazing work. Very well written and realistic. Anyone who has had a love like that can relate. Keep it up

Ten times five = 50 Stars

You out did yourself on this fabulous story. Most authors would have serialized it into about ten chapters, but you posted it all at once - so 10 x 5 stars = 50 stars worth of praise for your work. This is a nice emotional piece of work that actually brought a tear to my eyes at the end. I found it very easy to identify with Jim at key points in the story - sort of a been there, done that kind of situation. Thank you greatly for sharing.

COME ON !!!!!!!

There is not enough stars to give this story!!!!! 25 pages and I didn't want it to end! This is officially my all time favorite story. I could actually feel Jim's frustration of not getting the woman he loved! And then his death, I felt the same thing for Sara!

The only constructive criticism would be this .... You addressed all of Jim's relationships, and he obviously loved his wife, however you never really detailed his love for her either in college or his reconciliation after she found Sara texts. I would have liked to read about that!

Also I would have liked to have seen Jim and Sara get together, however that would mean breaking up Sara's family. No you wrote it exactly the way it should have been written. TRUE TO LIFE! No magical happy endings it really was sad that Jim didn't find the perfect love he was looking for!

Hall of Erotic Fame Candidates

One best three or four Literotica stories I have read. Ranks with Rehnquist and close to D Q Steele's WWWM series. His subsequent stories indicate he has a better editor, although this one didn't have a great many errors.

Clare from Chicago probably got tired from lip reading. Wonder if she got her GED after dropping out of high school?

I agree

that this is one of the best I have read on Lit. Thanks for sharing.

Great story!

We should all be so fortunate in our relationships. Excellent portrayal of the imperfect ending life commonly deals us.

wow!!!!

Well done!!!!!! Absolutely a breeze!!!

Oh my god,what an amazing story!

Outstanding!

Wonderful story, I wish there were more, though there couldn't be. Well done, with great emotional components that made the characters real.

One of the best!

Thanks! One of the best things I have read here.

Excellent

Loved it - you have a beautiful pace and write eloquently and with a feeling of sexual reality which is unusual on a forum like Literotica. I applaud your writing wholeheartedly. Hope you write professionally as I think you are easily good enough!
Criticism - what could I criticise? That you skipped several years in the middle there and therefore deprived us of several more chapters of wonderful writing. :)

Really excellent

Seemed like real story. No forced happy ending.