Building Utopia Ch. 14

GREAT STORY!!!

You forgot to mention how many children did Roger had? Also how many wives did he still had????

Many thanks

I've thoroughly enjoyed reading this series. Thank you for sharing such a great story. It would make a great movie.

Great Series

I really liked this series and found the idea of rewriting history pretty fascinating. For example..."the british "DIDN'T" kept a coming"

So obviously Roger altered the timeline and the future is now different. Did it change Roger's previous reality? or can 2 or more timelines run cuncurrently?

As always you keep us in the story !!

Thank you for so many great stories and just being who you are. Love all your writings and wish for more every day.What can I say ( it's just so much fun to read your work) please sir may we have more.
Thank you !!

GREAT!!!

Great ending, "Reach for the stars". Indeed. German immigrants would be highly valuable, as they were the premier gun makers for several centuries. Can anybody say "C 96 Mauser pistol" ? Each immigrant group contributed something to the American culture. Short, but well written. Thank you.

Just not feeling it

You are a gifted writer and I'm a big fan of your loving wives and romance work. However I think maybe this genre isn't for you or maybe your writing style isn't right for it. Never did I feel any excitement or emotional attachment to the characters. Things were just too easy for the hero giving him truck, guns welding gear and dogs wasn't enough you gave him a hardware store worth of gear. The sex scenes and romance were lacking. I will never understand literotica I swear, how the hell did this chapter earn a hot designation, there was no sex at all. I hope to read more of your work in the future but this one just didn't do it for me.

Just Not Feeling It?

Maybe you have grown to like the same old as always. I think it was a wonderful story man gets pushed back in time. instead of Panicking he used his Brains to do better.
Now thats a good idea.

Where is the plot?

This has been like reading a history book. At the beginning there seemed to be the possibility of a story with people, relationships, drama, but then it turned into a "fantasy" version of a text book.

Loved it! Thank you for sharing your story with us.

You have provided many hours of enjoyment as I have read your stories!

THIS STORY SO-SO!!

You forgot to list his long Legacy of Family&Status????(eg) HOW MANY WIVES DID ROGER HAD ALSO HOW MANY CHILDREN HE HAD & WITH WHAT WIFE HE HAD(eg) SUNNY,DEAR,White Woman from the same timeline as Roger??? or did he had more WIVES????? PLEASE WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER ?????

Great story

Really liked the nationbuilding aspect and the ideas of kickstarting the industrial revolution.
It did seem to speed up to fast in the end, and i would have liked the story to be longer. But a really good read.

Far from Utopia

I'm not sure where to begin. Let's start with the story; basically it's about what's wrong with our country and what the writer would do to fix all the country's problems if he were sent back in time. Well good start for a story. I'm blown away that the writer chose to dump democracy in favor for a dictatorship! Wow! OK, maybe a monarchy, but nothing in as written about guaranteed freedoms or written laws. It seemed to me people were told what to do and what jobs to do. Like communists. Another problem I had with the story was a lack of detail. An example is the war with Florida. The writer used a whole paragraph for that. It went something like this; "Using superior tactics and firepower we defeated Florida." There was more in the story, but not much more. I read a comment that said that everything came too easy for the main character. Spot on. Very little conflict makes for a boring read. In fact the story read more like a dry history lesson than anything else. Lastly I got to say the main character is a motherfucking piece of shit scumbag. The people who were brought to this country via the slave trade endured Hell on the trip from Africa. Overcrowding, sickness, rape and murder were common. Those people were in dire straights but what does the main character do? Help? Nah. Make them go through Hell again by sending them back. Scumbag. This story is insulting to me. Worse than being insulting this story's boring. 1 star

Great story but.....

It's a great story but it left me questions about the people he left behind in his old timeline, family and friends and what not.

Quite Good

Maybe I just havn't found all the great masterpieces on this site yet, but even after reading some of the more criticizing comments, I can say that this story is one of my favourites. While you did miss mentioning some things around the beginning and middle, I was able to follow easilly and the conclusion left me satisfied.

Very interesting...

reminds me of 1632, by Eric Flint, and the subsequent Grantville works.

Well done.

Good job.

SSpencer 67 a dumbass?

Here's something to think about, you know the slaves that were brought over and sent back, which do you think they would have chosen? Living in a land where the know no one and little else about the society or return to their homeland? They are being returned so does that automatically imply that they must suffer the same conditions? Instead of thinking of the good in what he did you try to find fault which is why you are a dumbass.

about the slaves

Pretty good bet they were just thrown over board. That trip from Africa was one-way 98% of the time.

wow

That would be something by now a colony on the moon starting from late 1600's.

History Book

Agree with a previous comment that this reads like a history book. Could use some more fleshing out unless that was the intention. Otherwise, this is an interesting read as it is, with how the author imagines his perfect alternate timeline.

What an imagination

Would that it really happened this way. Man is so intelligent that they would copy ideas and soon counter them. And crazies would kill innocents in any society. Just like your Indians would allow assimilation the French, Spanish, and English would band together under Christian guises to oppose such an endeavor. No telling how the Muslims would band together. Like the recent things man has discovered all it takes is the idea that something is possible for man to do it.

entertaining

and thought provoking

thanks

Enjoyed the story

I rarely read stories this long but I really enjoyed this one. The only comment is in one of the last chapters it is mentioned that Sunny had died 'several years earlier'. Since she was a major character I can't see why this wasn't mentioned when it happened, rather than later. Still, a good read.

Utopia?

In what way does the kingdom of North (and South?) America resemble Utopia? If they were "building Utopia" shouldn't there be some comparison between the society that was built and Utopia? It seems Utopia is from the Greek, for no place. Or possibly good place. Its not clear to me how a hereditary Monarchy with all family members in important administrative jobs will work after the founding monarch dies.

more

Should do a follow up story were they go to space like the end of the story suggested. Maybe aliens come to see earth and anew beginning for mankind can happen.

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA ?

I did not realize that the Kansas motto - To the Stars Through Difficulty - was that well know to Show Me's! EXCELLENT weaving of a tale of fantasy! Has Orson Wells been looking over your shoulder?

Excellent

Great yarn and use of imagination. Also poses the eternally elusive question what would one do in a survival situation like this? Looking forward to some other great yarns from your creative mind. Thank you very much. SF VET.

Awesome

I started reading the first chapter on 7/5/16. And finished on 7/6/16. I love everyone of the chapters. Great imagination. Nice work

The thing that bugs me about your alternative timeline stories is that you start out building a character and characters, then completely forget about 99% of them and their personality by the first 1/3 of the story. I know if you didn't do that your stories would be 100's of pages, but still, they would be a hell of a lot more personable.

Thought Provoking

I read your story straight through from the beginning. It was a very interesting read with a lot of imagination shown in it. I was disappointed in loss of character continuity. It seems as though you were rushing to finish the story. What happened to Sunny and Deer? How man children did he have with each? It seemed like an after thought when you said the were killed in an attack. What about Ruth and her children? Margarita and her family?

Unlike most, for me; sex scenes are not that important for keeping my interest in a smooth flowing story.

I have read all of your works to date and have enjoyed all but two of them very much. I gave you five stars for imagination on this one, but wish it were about eight or ten chapters longer for a much more developed story. Keep up the excellant writing, I feel like I know everyone SW MO, especially the Fielding Clan, LOL

Outstanding!

This is one of the best of this genre I've run across! It's got a few weaknesses in continuity, as mentioned about lack of detail regarding the deaths of Sunny and Deer, Ruth & Margurite & their children. Otherwise it was damned well thought out.