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by Cleardaynow01/19/14

Another lovely one from Oldbear

So nice. The picture, the thoughts and overarching persona of the narrator - all lovely.

Tut, Oldbear. You really should proof read a bit more - spellchecker does not pick up all the mistakes.

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by Tsotha01/21/14

Nice scene; you drop a few details here and there between the straightforward description, and those are what pull me in. For example, the insight about his mind being on the acreage left to work, and the daylight left to get it done. Those more subjective details add to the unnamed character, and just makes him more interesting. Suddenly I 'understand' what kind of farmer he is, I can relate (at least a little).

However, I agree with Cleardaynow, this could have used a proofread. A few mistakes detract from your work, I don't usually pay much attention, but for some reason they managed to pull my attention here.

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