Excellent story. Please dont go by what another stupid person has said here,in the comments. I have noticed some very maggot brained people are peculiarly here,who cannot appreciate,their only attitude is talking rubbish about anything.
Bloody try writing a story yourself before telling crap to others.
Learn to appreciate,big time looser
But with all the gang rape going on in India, I find it difficult to read erotic stories by people from that country. What on earth could your society be thinking, condoning this egregious behavior as if it is fun.
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Anonymous01/27/14
A good motif
It is a good motif, but you show your inexperience in writing by hurried narration. This motif can be made into a great elaboration. Go slow, and add imaginations, contexts and "real-like" circumstances and thoughts, feelings and expressions. Do not make it a quicky. Importantly, do not bother what the other person threw up. There are rapists and sex-offenders in every country. That does not make the country or its people rapists. Some humans are less humans, and some are greater; every country has similar share of these two groups. Unfortunately, some, like sparkswillfly, lack this basic understanding of human society.
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Total fucking rubbish by A Wanker
Crap
Excellent
Excellent story. Please dont go by what another stupid person has said here,in the comments. I have noticed some very maggot brained people are peculiarly here,who cannot appreciate,their only attitude is talking rubbish about anything.
Bloody try writing a story yourself before telling crap to others.
Learn to appreciate,big time looser
I Know it's not Faqir
But with all the gang rape going on in India, I find it difficult to read erotic stories by people from that country. What on earth could your society be thinking, condoning this egregious behavior as if it is fun.
A good motif
It is a good motif, but you show your inexperience in writing by hurried narration. This motif can be made into a great elaboration. Go slow, and add imaginations, contexts and "real-like" circumstances and thoughts, feelings and expressions. Do not make it a quicky. Importantly, do not bother what the other person threw up. There are rapists and sex-offenders in every country. That does not make the country or its people rapists. Some humans are less humans, and some are greater; every country has similar share of these two groups. Unfortunately, some, like sparkswillfly, lack this basic understanding of human society.
Nice Story
Your story made me remember, good time I had with my teacher, a divorcee living in a secluded house. I will write about it soon.
Carry on Reshma and share more of your experiences.
nice story
really nice.... keep writing and entertaining us....
Great first time story
Keep writing more!
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write more about those next 9 months :)
best
when girl writing a sex story , then it become very sexy and good to read, for example, girl tell is her feelings,
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