My Perfect Threesome

The tension between the charcters seemed real. The sex was hot and sexy. But you spared the conversations, dialogs. They would provide better details to your text.

Thank you!

i greatly appreciate the feedback. i am new at this and will, hopefully, learn my way around.

i will certainly take all feedback under consideration for future submissions.

i hope you enjoyed my story!

A very raunchy, well-written romp. I agree that letting the characters speak would add a lot to the story, and pull your readers even closer to the action. Nice work.

Impressive first story

I was captivated. I'm not a literary critic, so my opinion carries no professional weight. I liked the way you leave me free to imagine the characters, unburdened by excessive physical description. It's an action story, which suits me for starters. I'll be reading your second story in a minute, and I'm wondering if I'll learn more about the emotions of the narrator. I would love to be any one of the three characters in your story!

Excellent

What an exquisitely submissive mind you have. What a good girl you are.