Wild One

very evocative .. when do me meet? I can't wait...

I like the first stanza. It's a nice opening.

The message in your poem comes across pretty strong. I like your choice of words, and the format, these short, direct sentences. They seem to create a resonance. Very well done.

There were two possible mistakes I noticed:

s3, l1: "they tattered and worn." -> "they *are* tattered and worn" ?
s4, l1: "love without abandon." -> Shouldn't it be "love *with* abandon", that is, "without restraint"?

Thank you for your feedback!
I'm usually very careful when it comes to grammar, so I'm going to blame those errors on the fact that this was a spur of the moment, middle of the night submission. I am completely new to writing and poetry, so all feedback is welcome!

Hmmmmm.....Come to Me!

Challenging

I agree with Tsotha about the two blips, but the message is received. This is both a promise and challenge, a submissive seeking and warning a lover.