It's a good start, but a bit too short. You also need to check your Grammar. Looking forward to chapter 2. But, please don't leave it too long to write it.
Are his eyes green, blue or both?
I like it...keep going...thx
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Pretty Good Chapter.
It's a good start, but a bit too short. You also need to check your Grammar. Looking forward to chapter 2. But, please don't leave it too long to write it.
consistancy
Are his eyes green, blue or both?
like it
I like it...keep going...thx
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