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Get yourself a decent editor
If you're planning a lengthy series, make sure you get some help to make your rather long and convoluted paragraphs a bit more readable. Shorter sentences and a bit of punctuation will help. This is just a suggestion, not an offer by the way.
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Learn the difference between site and sight
Write Your Story****
Fuck those two idiots neither has a story on record.
Idiots
You do not need to be a writer to see errors in a story
Interesting start!
It's intriguing, and I look forward to more, but some editing would make it better.
Seems short, even for a 'prologue'
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