Alpha-Beta

keep it comming

sounds like fun

nice.. it would be fun to change at will, but I would be a lovely girl most of the time

Then I blew my brains out

Because this was terminally stupid and I couldn't live with the shame. Just awful.

Hey, Fuck you

You want to actually leave validated criticism in my stories then okay I can deal but you say stupid stuff like "terminally stupid" without any explanation then I can't improve

It may just be me

But I feel like the story was kinda fast paced or rather, there wasn't much of a story to it. I mean if it's like an abstract to give you a small bit of something, maybe it can work. After all how it opened up was nice, you gave a good background and let us know about this rave of people and their special ability. If it's not like some abstract though, then there doesn't seem to be much to it, other than two people having a chance encounter, getingt laid rather quickly and then going their separate ways. Again, if it's an abstract just to introduce the idea of the story, then I suppose it can work, otherwise, as it stands now, there really isn't all that much content in here to follow up on, or even just standing alone.