Stick It Out No Matter What

AS MUCH AS SHE LOVES IT

he loves it even more. TK U MLJ LV NV

The writing was good enough.

The plot was not. Not good enough and just plain not good. An MRI that reveals a behavioral abnormality (lack of impulse control)? A behavior abnormality that apparently only manifests in the inability to say "NO!" in amorous situations? How about a writer looking desperately for a mechanism whereby a wife can cheat, the marriage can survive, and the author can dodge the slings and arrows of an outraged Burn-the-Bitch posse. Thank you for sharing with us, but even in a category where there aren't very many untried plot twists, this one was simply too unbelievable for me.

Loss of impulse control is...

...loss of impulse control. Period. You would have done better to explain her willing ways because of some psychological trauma rather than playing brain surgeon.
Oh, and while we're at it, why'd he have to be a rich super secret killing machine? Those tired devices are indicative of a lazy writer.

Loved it

Apparently the previous two commentators ( or is it commenters) don't ever watch TV or movies. The plot was more realistic than two thirds of what is on TV or in the movies, and the sex - which is what I'm looking for - was great. I thought it was extremely original, and it certainly was entertaining. 5* in my book.

OK, I can see some recycled plot hooks

but I find the suspension of disbelief easier, when I find that I am NOT asked to entertain the thought of him slowly becoming a sexual deviant; getting off on her cheating. Instead, he is a man who decided that THIS was the biggest obstacle he'd have to overcome in order to be with her in matrimony. He was calm, prepared, and managed his burning seething rage to calculated precision. So, it's the old classic Nympho/Pyro hotheaded mismatch, and she'll always be on the lookout for fireworks. My biggest problems with this story, but two....
1) It is hinted at but never developed, as to what her conscious inner voice was telling her. How cold and calculating was she? But also, had she come to live in both fear and awe of the man? Dangerous to others, yet dedicated enough to her, to be the only permanent viable solution to her problem. She knew she would fuck up and get caught up, but at least she didn't lie about it, and in her own way prepared him for it. We THINK we know that she can't control it, but you never developed the potential for her to be, in actuality, completely in control and maniacal in her scheming. What if she targeted guys to fuck and THEN fuck over? She already had a built in Punisher/Avenger ready to kill maim and destroy (plus he IS a millionaire/spy/special forces/computer guru- so he pays the bills AND cashes the checks). So who was really calling the shots here?
2) The intentional need to justify or rationalize cheating has led us to a dark story. You have a line where the insurance fuck shows up at the door, after his professional career has been destroyed, to complain that merely fucking the slut didn't equal destroying his life. Your written response is to send him to prison with one testicle. Like, "OH you thought you had it bad before, did you? Coming here just made your life a whole lot worse!!" OK, I see this type of revenge as keeping the BTB crowd at bay, but if this is how you feel, then come out and own it. Don't try to hide hidden messages, that offer contrary moralistic philosophy. Revenge is good, But this guy is the extreme? Are you or are you not challenging your audience to question: Is this babe worth it? If she is, could just anybody do what this guy felt he had to do? Is cheating OK? Is MURDER? Which is worse? Who is worse? And so revert back to my last paragraph, with out her developed side to the story, we never have enough info to properly compare the two. You want us to guess, that she IS worse, and he had to do what he had to do. Better to never have married her, and spent his fortune tracking down Cheryl. But isn't murder worse than cheating? Sorry, you can play musical chairs with the "Chicken or the egg came first" quandary, but still I'd say these two were perfect for each other. I just can't envision a woman worth killing over, (yourself, or others!).
But thanks, Hapless, it was nice to see your ideas for a strong male lead. I know you have experimented a lot with the wimp genre, so this IS a bit different. Unfortunately, the voting public might just rate it as "more of the same...a fantastical Burn the Bastards that Fuck With The Bitch type of send-up. Well I, for one, thank you for sharing it with us, anyway! Keep Going, till the next!

Comment on last Anon starting with"OK"

Wow - I'm in shock - an actually well thought out, intelligent, Anon comment! What is LW coming to?
My only complaint, I never once have written about a wimp.

Should have been in Fantasy not LW

You need to be wearing hip waders with the amount of BS being thrown around in this story. It comes across as if it were written by a juvenile boy. If you are going to write a story, stick to facts, not things you wish were real.

Interesting story

I would class this story as good entertainment. In terms of plot, I think the husband's response to the situation made sense, if one believes the medical diagnosis. Reminds me a little of one of PapaToad's stories, Pyro Pete, but in this case the wife is indeed a loving wife.

Stay away from military backgrounds for your characters. The "leaps" of faith the reader has to take while reading stories with such a setup ruins what you try to accomplish.

Interesting and Entertaining Fantasy

The medical science seems abused enough for the story to be pushed into the Sci-Fi category, but it was valid device for constructing a story which will leave some of us furious and others fearful. Try to imagine your significant other with this problem. Now if we had the "MRI" before marriage, I would not have had the courage to marry her!

so shallow

a brain scan shows she is "impulsive' beyond her control. the Tom Cruse hero is a legitimate killer so secret even the Pentagon is unaware of him. this is not enought. you also need to toss in some vampires and werewolfs. why not a little hatred of the wife to show how sensitive the hubby is and how heroic he is in still loving her, btw. thank you for your service to our country.

A frothy noir read booming with intensity?

From a perfectionist point of view, it would have been great if two bad guys at end had been heavily connected. That would have been perfect as an excuse to tie back in the old army buddies for one last payback caper. Also the title of story is no where near as graceful it's actual literary contents.

Still it can't be denied that this was oodles of fun to read. The inability of wife to exercise best carnal judgement was a deft deliniation, that I'm not sure is valid, but am not prepared to entirely deny. Well played.

Ok

I thought this was an outstanding story. Hey only Taliban and other assholes were harmed. A nice family emerges. What more could you want..... Ooh Rah....Way to go.....

Nice story it was different! Than the usual

Go job here. But I bet a lot of readers missed it seeing it was not posted in the 10allowed for loving wives. It was. No11 this day so unless someone was looking for extra stories you should repost it.

trust me no bitch is worth all of that effort if she is so easily fucked

i think the author is mentally retarded

wow that wretched

Real...No

Real Fun read...YES

A nice escape story

I liked it: 5*****

Thanks for writing. BTW, I believe in her "lack of impulse control" I often suffer from it in similar situations.

tom anon

Checklist

Special Forces: Check Sorry. BETTER than special forces

Rich: Check And even better, untraceable wealth

Hottest wife in town: check

Murderous: Check

Never Indicted or suspected: Check

Yes, you win LW bingo...

It's***

A read.

It's a piece of crap!

Crapula! What a filthy,vile,rancid story!
The author needs to take some deadly snake venom with Black Flag!
Worthless trash!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PU!!!
If it reads and smells like it was written by a skunk then it was written by a stinking fart!
PU-CRAP!!

Very entertaining read, never mind any improbabilities.

And I read for entertainment. Thank you, author, for this entertaining story.

JUST A DREAM,,,JUST A DREAM

nightmarish as it may see, now its revile. TK U MLJ LV NV

Nothing bad about the writer

He has a really cool imagination LOL

I love it - not real of course not -

He was vindictive - yep he was but only at people who took advantage of his wife - stay straight you have nothing to fear from him.

Unprincipled - NO - he was moral and consistent - just one lucky ass SOB lol.

The best!

You would have to know just how the kind of people the husband was part of think and act to really understand why this is a totally believable plot. Explosive experts are a different breed in the best of cases. Special ops types also have to be able to operate in some extremely weird situations without freaking out. So yes I can easily see something like this actually happening if the circumstances occurred as given.

Well written

Would be hard to stay with her anywhere else but in story land. But since that's where they live, it is a good marriage. Hopefully her impulse control problem would not cause her to kill him in the middle of the night. But life is a hoot.

Why?

Would anybody in their right mind marry someone such as Denise?! The excuse that she doesn't have impulse control is pure bullshit---can you imagine if child killers/rapists/murders use that lame excuse to get out of taking responsibility for their actions? This world would be fuck'd. I really couldn't understand why the loser was mad at the men when it's his gutter slut he should've been mad at. I didn't read ANYWHERE where she tried to stay faithful. What does it say about her when she's eager/willing to drop her thongs for ANY man that smiles at her? He knowingly married a woman that can't be faithful.... Nuff said....I'm very happy this story is fantasy.. What kind of relationship would that be chasing guys away cause your slut just can't say no...a very sad one...

You guys can complain all you want to but....

from his description of what a great fuck she is, can you blame him for keeping her and fucking her or for all the guys who used to fuck her for coming back for more of that great pussy? (even though it ended up leading to the death sentence for a couple of them) .....just sayin'....

I Don't Understand!

It was a well written and creative story BUT I just couldn't get past the fact that this guy married this woman when she admitted that she was a cheater and pretty easy. The no impulse control was pure BS, just another excuse to cheat. That one concept ruined a pretty good story for me. Thanks for the writing.

There's no such thing as a neurological basis for a lack of impulse control limited to amorous situations. If it were neurological, then she would have problems with impulse control in general
It's a mental issue that she should have gotten counselling for.

IF YOU DONT BEAT THEM OR JOIN THEM

instruct them in consequences. TK U MLJ LV NV