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Cute and fun...
Great buildup for such a short story. Nikki is funny and daring and pretty adorable. The sex was hot, though one sided, which I am hoping gets taken care of in chapter 2 :)
I am not a super picky reader, and for the most part this story read really well. I like first person POV as it allows for some free flowing thoughts. Still, it could use a read through, by someone else, prior to posting (editor, friend, another writer). Nothing major, but you likely meant fateful day, rather than faithful... And "lead" rather than "elude me to believe". Now I do look picky.. Crap :)
Loved it
Keep going I can't wait for part 2. This story is right up my alley.
Very nice
Love the build up, keep it going
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An enjoyably sexy little story. Here's a tip to make your text look neater. When writing numbers, it's better to use words than figures. The exceptions are when giving the time (be sure to make it clear by using a.m. or p.m.) or when writing astronomical-sized figures. For example: At 9:50 a.m., she bought ten doughnuts for breakfast; but a high figure could be written as, say, 'twenty-five thousand' if a round figure, but '25,639' if using words would be cumbersome.
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