Your story wasn't that bad. The ending if strengthened and provided more stimulation would be more satisfying than your quick and over ending. Go over the story again and add to the feelings you want to stimulate in your story. We want time and stimulation to enjoy reading your story and situation. Enjoy fluffing up your story. You have the talent and imagination.
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Anonymous04/20/14
enjoyed
I enjoyed it. The ending made it better for me :)
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Anonymous07/06/14
Absolute Nonsense
You did a reasonable job of heightening the tension throughout the story and then ruined it in the last paragraph. I have always hated the type of story that end, "And then she woke up and found it was all a dream." This one falls right into that category.
English
sorta stupid
stupid and wierd
Agreement with any other unfortunate readers!
Unworthy of critical comment; thankfully both brief and predictably boring!
thought it was hot.
don't get what the other comments are on about. loved the end,
Time for a Good Ending
Your story wasn't that bad. The ending if strengthened and provided more stimulation would be more satisfying than your quick and over ending. Go over the story again and add to the feelings you want to stimulate in your story. We want time and stimulation to enjoy reading your story and situation. Enjoy fluffing up your story. You have the talent and imagination.
enjoyed
I enjoyed it. The ending made it better for me :)
Absolute Nonsense
You did a reasonable job of heightening the tension throughout the story and then ruined it in the last paragraph. I have always hated the type of story that end, "And then she woke up and found it was all a dream." This one falls right into that category.
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