I rarely read in this category, and 2nd person POV usually makes me groan in disappointment after a paragraph or less, but you really made it work. It felt immediate the whole way through, and there weren't any of the usage errors that distract from some of the hottest stories. Definitely 5 stars for a story that is both hot and well-written.
This one of some of the naughtiness I did when much younger and had a willing partner. Okay no anal in public, that is a bit much, but lots of sex in places that were semi-public and very public. Thank you for reminding me, 5 stars
Yeah, second person usually doesn't do much for me, and I was worried for a second. But you delivered the story incredibly well.
My main highlight? That the story was hot and arousing. Short, to the point, and tense. There wasn't much blunt characterization, but you wrote it in such a way that I knew the characters, through their actions and emotions. Some of the time it was difficult to immerse myself into the story as the POV calls for, but your use of vivid description and tense emotion helped put me there.
English
Wow, a very hot story. 5 stars.
Thanks!
Thanks for the five stars, and for being the first comment on my story, katestyle! I really appreciate it.
-TKO
Outstanding
Excellent scene-setting, pacing, and, of couse, the butt-fucking! Brava!! Looking forward to more of your stories.
This was hot
Five stars
Ugh, you made me miss Brooklyn!
Great story. Really hot with enough verisimilitude to give a reader the "you are THERE!" feeling.
I look forward to more!
whimper, want
not much more to it than that, its naughty but realistic and totally hot.
Very nice.
I rarely read in this category, and 2nd person POV usually makes me groan in disappointment after a paragraph or less, but you really made it work. It felt immediate the whole way through, and there weren't any of the usage errors that distract from some of the hottest stories. Definitely 5 stars for a story that is both hot and well-written.
Reminding
This one of some of the naughtiness I did when much younger and had a willing partner. Okay no anal in public, that is a bit much, but lots of sex in places that were semi-public and very public. Thank you for reminding me, 5 stars
It was uh, uplifting.
Yeah, second person usually doesn't do much for me, and I was worried for a second. But you delivered the story incredibly well.
My main highlight? That the story was hot and arousing. Short, to the point, and tense. There wasn't much blunt characterization, but you wrote it in such a way that I knew the characters, through their actions and emotions. Some of the time it was difficult to immerse myself into the story as the POV calls for, but your use of vivid description and tense emotion helped put me there.
Great story.
These things do happen!!!
Very hot. What I'd call a quicky but a goody. 5 stars
Taste it.
Picturing him licking his load out of her stretched anus made me hard as steel. Excellent writing. I look forward to future posts. 5 stars.
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