In the Quarry

A big story strongly told

Have read this several times. This poem is very strong. It tells a strong story and there are real human thoughts, feelings and issues it weaves in. Which I sort of suspect is essentially what poetry actually is about.

I particularly like the section 'while a parent dreams'.

I am a little unsure whether the pace and rhyming are spot on. And I mean unsure, it is quite possible that they are. The short lines tend to emphasise & possibly overemphasise the rhyme. However, this story does not lend itself to prettified verse.

I look forward to reading more poems from you.