All Comments on 'The Notebook Ch. 01'

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you need to wright more. some lesbian and other things like ffm and group sex

Good start and setting of the scene. Will be good to see how you develop it and how the character of Bethany develops

I love the first installment of what I hope to be a series of stories.

And please, ignore the dumbo wanting thr poor girl to 'go lesbo' straight off the bat. We've got TOO TOO MANY lesbo scenarios creeping into stories belonging to other categories as it is !

Your story is intriguing. But please please, pretty please, keep it hetero.

Would like to know what she looks like though