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Fun read
I swear you will write about a straight guy who is deadly smart and tough to boot some day though.
Hummmmm!
I didn't like the story nor did I hate the story but, for the start I thought there would be someone who was going to be wronged. (Confusion and Confused) There was nothing but lost thinking. Lying wronged people who did wrong complaining about someone doing them wrong only to tell in a round about way what they did wrong should not write it down, hell it confused me.
Please remove the incest
It was a decent story aside from the incest, and Cable's suggestion of just keeping quiet about being brother and sister holds no water, after all it was an open secret who was Jeannie's father, and with Sarah also openly declaring that they were sisters, them marrying seems like a good way to get a prison sentence.
Their parents also seem awfully accepting of it.
Why the incest bit?
The incest bit between the half brother and sister does not add a thing to the story and just adds an inconsistent, unbelievable twist to this story.
Meh
Not one of your best efforts. All the jumping around between the family description and story was annoying. Also your time line is messed up. First time the wife got pregnant was in college, she lost it, then she got pregnant again later on. But going by her current age of 37 and oldest kid at 20. She would have been 17 . Doesn't add up. And the guy who marries a pregnant girl and was going to raise the kid on his own and loved her, isnt going to cheat .
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Had all the emotional oomph of a flat rock.
I LIKED IT
This story is a no brainer it's a light hearted bit of a well fucked up family sheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeit! The son wants to marry his half sister fuuuuuuuuuck me! I keep seeing Angelina Jolie kissing her brother! You know this story should be called THEY ALL FLEW OVER THE CUCKOO'S NEST! I liked it. Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE. NO CUCKOO'S OR ANGELINA AND HER BROTHER WERE HARMED MAKING THIS COMMENT! BYE!
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Not your best
I like it
Caleb should have a dif father. Whore wife cheated and told him at the end.
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