Soccer Mom Hypnotized Ch. 02

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I love the story but there should be longer chapters. Don't do 146 installments. 4-5 chapters 5-6 pages of decent content.

this is god.

I want to read more and more of this?

The kids aren't older enough to play soccer unless the women had the kids before getting married.

Too short

The length is way to show.

Other problem:
-To easy to capture woman.
-No resistance.
-Ages are way off. 25 is way to young to be soccer mom. Add 5 years minimum.
-Kind of boring sex. (I do like see the woman be more active.)

Okay idea, Weak Execution

The idea is intriguing, but this isn't really a story, it's just some guy's fantasy. It's very repetitive, the sex isn't particularly exciting, and there is zero characterization. I don't expect this can evolve beyond what it is.

When might we get new chapters.