Mindy's Moving Day - CFNM Ch. 02

Loved every part of it, my wife does the same to me

nice job!

that was hot...thanks!

want-a-be

would this love to have my wife treat me like

All good things come to an end

I can accept a hubby who is power broker during the day and a submissive masochist at night. But have trouble believing the sudden involvement of his female swim team. No way would that fly as it risks his day time persona. Also there is absolutely no way that every girl on the team would have been okay with what was going on. Yet in the story not a single one voiced a concern or just left.

Nope, a lot more prep was needed before the group humiliation, And no powerbroker would take becoming a cuckhold the easily or that fast.

Based on the characters you started with ... His calm acceptance at the end does't seem to mesh.

Just my thoughts.

StormX

Stormx - Sorry it didn't work for you. Was the swim team a big far-fetched? Maybe. Do I believe it works within the fantasy world I created? Sure, why not? As established, this is a story of a transition for a married couple on the edge of something more in their life. I took a risk and notched it up. Too far for some from the lower votes. Then again, I have yet to write an interracial piece that anyone liked. Whatever magic Mindy and Debbie had when they invited the swim team isn't shown. As far as him maintaining his control over his team - some of us who have been part of a team know how secrets stay with the team and how some coaches continue to rule regardless of anything else. Far fetched? Perhaps. Faithful to the characters? Well, I tried. Additionally, please don't hesitate to message me if you'd like. I do have my PMs turned on. Thank you for taking the time to leave a comment. BD

Great

Loved it

Story was a bit wordy for me in all the descriptions of the characters, their jobs, backgrounds, etc (what can I say, I just want them to get down to it!). But the story rocked, and built splendidly to where Leon breeds the subs ass, especially after the bitch was put on display as someone who gets involuntarily hard and uncontrollably spills his load just from taking it in his whore ass. But, by far the hottest part was Leon insultingly calling the sub a 'fucking queer' after breeding the little faggot; that made me fucking squirt like a little bitch too!

Good until the swimteam

Felt like involving the swim team jumped the shark. Great other wise.

Really liked it

Really good story.

I wish the swim team, after witnessing the performance, hadn't been demeaning to the coach at practice but had shown an understanding of why he did what he did.

Ashley-Marie seemed to have potential to want to introduce her own boyfriend to strap-on sex -- or maybe she and Debbie could take turns with the protagonist. Would love to read about that.

Agree swim team was too much

Four characters is enough in a stroke story. Not that I've followed that rule myself, but in my case I chose for my central characters to have sex in a venue, such as a public bar, and that others were present made sense.
DonaldElliott11

Very Good

I enjoyed the read. Thank you for posting it.

More humiliation, the better

Sissy is lucky. If I were there he would be in chastity. The girls would have seen him drip and leak his sperm all over that table to clean up. Should have had him leak the studs hot thick sperm all over the table too then clean that up. Cuckold is now enjoying creampies and I am sure more than one of the wife's lovers has been sucked off or fucked sissy as well. Very good job. Will be reading more of your work.

TO-BECOME CUCKOLD

Sissy had fun and sounds like more to come. I would love to to the sissy for BBC and strap-ons from all. Love to-do CLEAN-UP on all

Hot

The swim team should have made him lick their feet or smell their socks

waste of time.

A week later he got smart divorced and let everyone that leon worked with about leon having sex with another man. fucked every giel from his swim team before divorcing his bitch wife while she's tied to a chair and gaged with that toy.. lol

Stupid as shit

Title of the review applies to the story and Bucky Duckman

love it

I love this story and would love to see it continue :)

chapter 01

I loved chapter 01, hands down. The revelation that secrets had been shared, the pushing of boundaries, the imagined (feared?) becoming the real, would have been devastating, but it all wove back together within the loving relationship at the end. I'm a romantic that way... well, most of the time.

Chapter 02 was equally well written. You still have good narration, excellent dialogue, and simply wonderful story-telling. The difference with chapter 02 (for me) started with the feeling of dread that accompanied the humiliation. Most of that was because Debbie required his exposure to the rest of his world. He did allow it... well, he didn't resist it. Then there was the feeling of betrayal (sorry, that's the feeling) that came when Debbie fucked Leon. The humiliation drew out farther at home with the come-on-your-face scene (which really would have been better if you'd have gotten more descriptive).

And the dread? It was for the fading of the loving relationship and the rising of the dispassionate mistress (Debbie). Yeah, I know you had him say, "Quite honestly? We couldn't be happier." That seemed hollow to me because you didn't show him reacting to it as if he were happier, or relieved to live those titles. At no point did you let us feel him realizing that he was made for this, or really liked it, or was even surprised that he wanted it. So the honesty seemed claimed, but not cleanly demonstrated within the story.
The story was well told, had lots of action and character development. I did like it, but, as I've said, enjoyed chapter 01 the most. Please keep writing

didnt get where the story os going

Didnt get where the story was going. Group sex, loving wives, gay or humiliation? No single theme is properly highlighted. What the guy wants? Y he is so hapy in the end? Is not explained properly. He is humiliated in front of his team but then goes back to being strict coach. So wats the point? U can follpw up on on cuckold plot n tern him onto complete sub to finish his degradation. But thats author's choice to make.

Confused

I understand the theme of the story, and knew going in that it would disturb me and I read it anyway. My bad.

I'd have to kill Debbie, Mindy, and Leon.

Then, of course, I'd have to kill myself because there's no way I would go to jail with that story to follow me.

Both chapters were well written, carried the story line nicely, and had characters that were believable. You created very solid anchors between the two chapters so the forecasting warned what was really coming. Even his sexual responses and thoughts were believable.

Nice work. Brought tears of shame.

Amazing story

This story was pretty much the embodiment of my ultimate fantasy with the only exception being that Debbie's pussy would be overflowing with Leon's cum for our intrepid hero to suck out. Great story!

Would love to see a continuation of these characters.

disappointing second part

went from a 5 to a 2 in near record speed. chapter 2 is pure cliche. expected better from this author who rarely disappoints.