Great story, My fantasy, wish i was turned by BBC dominance like this.
to see what else turns me on in my sub bottom fantasy world, check out my tumblr site
http://jamie14u.tumblr.com/
jamie in Phoenix
Well Done, Well Written!
The story flows well, it builds and takes on a life of its own. The thought of being dominated, taken, used by a well hung young black man, not only watching him fuck your girl friend senseless, but then doing the same to you is mind blowing!
Please ask an editor to help you with the dialogue
I also loved "Hot College Threesome" and loved your reworking of the premise. Your exposition was good and the actual sex obviously appeals to a lot of us. But the words supposedly spoken by the characters were weak, in my opinion. And the one "wrong note" was Marcus' ridiculously long speech: "This happens a lot to white boys, especially when they play sports and have contact with black men in the locker room from a young age. ... . I don't need to degrade them. It's just a white boy sexually submitting to a black man, the way nature intended."
But - aren't I a hypocrite? - keep going.
by
Anonymous03/12/14
stole my comment
Ha, you stole my comment on some other story and used it as dialogue. It's all right, though. whatever works for you. I already emailed you about it. It didn't work as dialogue, but I stand by the statment.
Dude, I feel what you're saying. I'm a young black man with a big ass dick. I'm not gay but I love getting good head and fucking the tight ass of a "straight" white boy. I don't have to apologize for that or try and justify myself to anyone for what I dig. Neither do you my friend. Freedom, is never having to apologize or justifing yourself to anyone for what turns you on(as long as it's legal, not moral). Keep writing Dude!
by
Anonymous08/26/15
@BlackDynamite12Plus Denial is not just a river in Egypt
You are as gay as sunshine. Why are you so ashamed?
by
Anonymous07/15/16
Very hot story. Myself only had the pleasure once of sucking a white Shemale beautiful cock. Once was not enough. Dream of sucking a black Tgirls cock everyday.
by
Anonymous10/12/16
More chapters?
I hope you haven't given up on adding chapters to this story. I really enjoyed this and would love to see more.
One of my all time favorite stories on Literotica!
As the title say, this is one of my favorite stories on here, that I go back and read every once in awhile. The interracial, submissive, bisexual and gay ("forced" or not) aspects of it are all key reasons why for me (and btw your stories source material is another one of my preferred stories that I'll occasionally reread). I always hoped you would continue this story, as you yourself stated was your original intention. In fact I wanted to get more from this story so much, that a couple of times I've considered continuing it myself with my own version even though I've never write a story to post before. I only restrained myself from doing so, as not to butcher your work. Still hope you'll pick this storyline up again at some point, even though you wrote/posted this almost 3 years ago.....making it unlikely you will (I would guess).
Either way, good story, good characters, good detail (and good detail I feel is one of the most common legitimate criticisms of many Literotica stories) and just hot & erotic! Nice job......as is most of your other stories I've read too!
......and in case I haven't been clear or I've been vague, write more (both in general and this storyline 😛)!!!
English
awesome
Very nice! I wish my wife would do that. I've also want to be dominated by black cock, can't wait for next chapter.
Wish i was Turned like this
Great story, My fantasy, wish i was turned by BBC dominance like this.
to see what else turns me on in my sub bottom fantasy world, check out my tumblr site
http://jamie14u.tumblr.com/
jamie in Phoenix
Incredibly Hot!!
Well Done, Well Written!
The story flows well, it builds and takes on a life of its own. The thought of being dominated, taken, used by a well hung young black man, not only watching him fuck your girl friend senseless, but then doing the same to you is mind blowing!
Please ask an editor to help you with the dialogue
I also loved "Hot College Threesome" and loved your reworking of the premise. Your exposition was good and the actual sex obviously appeals to a lot of us. But the words supposedly spoken by the characters were weak, in my opinion. And the one "wrong note" was Marcus' ridiculously long speech: "This happens a lot to white boys, especially when they play sports and have contact with black men in the locker room from a young age. ... . I don't need to degrade them. It's just a white boy sexually submitting to a black man, the way nature intended."
But - aren't I a hypocrite? - keep going.
stole my comment
Ha, you stole my comment on some other story and used it as dialogue. It's all right, though. whatever works for you. I already emailed you about it. It didn't work as dialogue, but I stand by the statment.
Hot story!
Hope part two is out soon!
can't wait for part two!
This was great! keep em coming
Ridiculous fantasy
Written by a little black kid
"Written by a little black kid"
I'm white... and I'm not little, I'm average.
more please
This and Engine1844's story are amazingly hot. Can't wait to see what you do next. More soon please
When is ch 2 on its way?
great story
I always know a story is great when I wish I had written it.
Well done....
Freedom Is Never Having To Apologize!
Dude, I feel what you're saying. I'm a young black man with a big ass dick. I'm not gay but I love getting good head and fucking the tight ass of a "straight" white boy. I don't have to apologize for that or try and justify myself to anyone for what I dig. Neither do you my friend. Freedom, is never having to apologize or justifing yourself to anyone for what turns you on(as long as it's legal, not moral). Keep writing Dude!
@BlackDynamite12Plus Denial is not just a river in Egypt
You are as gay as sunshine. Why are you so ashamed?
Very hot story. Myself only had the pleasure once of sucking a white Shemale beautiful cock. Once was not enough. Dream of sucking a black Tgirls cock everyday.
More chapters?
I hope you haven't given up on adding chapters to this story. I really enjoyed this and would love to see more.
One of my all time favorite stories on Literotica!
As the title say, this is one of my favorite stories on here, that I go back and read every once in awhile. The interracial, submissive, bisexual and gay ("forced" or not) aspects of it are all key reasons why for me (and btw your stories source material is another one of my preferred stories that I'll occasionally reread). I always hoped you would continue this story, as you yourself stated was your original intention. In fact I wanted to get more from this story so much, that a couple of times I've considered continuing it myself with my own version even though I've never write a story to post before. I only restrained myself from doing so, as not to butcher your work. Still hope you'll pick this storyline up again at some point, even though you wrote/posted this almost 3 years ago.....making it unlikely you will (I would guess).
Either way, good story, good characters, good detail (and good detail I feel is one of the most common legitimate criticisms of many Literotica stories) and just hot & erotic! Nice job......as is most of your other stories I've read too!
......and in case I haven't been clear or I've been vague, write more (both in general and this storyline 😛)!!!
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