It's annoying that you use characteristics that are deemed "white" to call the girls Oreos. Being a ballerina of color who can boast about being in a company is wonderful! It doesn't make her an Oreo. And since when is Jimi Hendrix for white people only?! I don't mean any harm. Just thoughts.
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It's annoying that you use characteristics that are deemed "white" to call the girls Oreos. Being a ballerina of color who can boast about being in a company is wonderful! It doesn't make her an Oreo. And since when is Jimi Hendrix for white people only?! I don't mean any harm. Just thoughts.
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