I loved the story but wish that Sally had been part of this chapter.
I find it weird that Sally would leave Justine and not keep in touch with her and Justine's parents for all that they had done for Sally and that Justine was in love with Sally. To leave her so that she felt so bad and alone that she almost committed suicide was terrible. Why did Sally leave without letting Justine know where she was going? Did something happen that you have not told us in this chapter to break them up? Sally did seem to be in love with Justine. Do you plan to have Sally get in touch with Justine in a future chapter? Will they get back together so that they have a three some with Alice again?
PS: I noticed a bunch of typo errors in this chapter that spell check would not catch like HE instead of THE for instance. Check again before you submit or have someone read it to edit it for errors which keeps the flow of the story smoother. It almost felt like this story was done a little bit in a rush.
Really like this series, but as close as Justine and Sally were...with all they went through...Sally just disappearing does NOT make sense. Dropping her character without some believable reason...makes this one of the VERY FEW times I will comment about the character buildup...or lack thereof...in a story! I know it gives her Alice, but more could have been done as good as the rest of the stories are!
Alwyus proff read when you write, go back and read what you wrote, then maybe you'll see the errors, like ate instead of eat or Always instead of Alwyus and proof. see, I corrected my errors. Hoping you bring Sally back into the picture.
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Anonymous07/09/14
The reunioun
When you write chapter 5 you should make sallys return a happy tear filled one
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Anonymous07/31/14
i want justine and sally back together in chapter 5
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I loved the story but wish that Sally had been part of this chapter.
I find it weird that Sally would leave Justine and not keep in touch with her and Justine's parents for all that they had done for Sally and that Justine was in love with Sally. To leave her so that she felt so bad and alone that she almost committed suicide was terrible. Why did Sally leave without letting Justine know where she was going? Did something happen that you have not told us in this chapter to break them up? Sally did seem to be in love with Justine. Do you plan to have Sally get in touch with Justine in a future chapter? Will they get back together so that they have a three some with Alice again?
PS: I noticed a bunch of typo errors in this chapter that spell check would not catch like HE instead of THE for instance. Check again before you submit or have someone read it to edit it for errors which keeps the flow of the story smoother. It almost felt like this story was done a little bit in a rush.
RJ
I agree!
Really like this series, but as close as Justine and Sally were...with all they went through...Sally just disappearing does NOT make sense. Dropping her character without some believable reason...makes this one of the VERY FEW times I will comment about the character buildup...or lack thereof...in a story! I know it gives her Alice, but more could have been done as good as the rest of the stories are!
Alwayus
Alwyus proff read when you write, go back and read what you wrote, then maybe you'll see the errors, like ate instead of eat or Always instead of Alwyus and proof. see, I corrected my errors. Hoping you bring Sally back into the picture.
The reunioun
When you write chapter 5 you should make sallys return a happy tear filled one
i want justine and sally back together in chapter 5
I want sally back in chapter. 5 !!!! Plzzzzzz
Love it and want more
I love the story so much and really want more.
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