You read the story well. More practice might make it sound like telling the story to some one sitting on the porch with you under an evening breeze. Just a bit more relaxed... . I love the bits of the south that come across in your voice. ;)
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07/10/14
Nice, lilting
If I understand the story the way you intended it, then the tension in your voice is well-suited to the tension the protagonist feels when thinking about his seductress. What doesn't quite fit is that your voice sounds like that of an older man. Would he still feel that kind of tension, I wonder? Or wistfulness? At the beginning it seemed like regret, but that didn't seem to be borne out by the rest of the story. Confusion, then?
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I liked it.
You read the story well. More practice might make it sound like telling the story to some one sitting on the porch with you under an evening breeze. Just a bit more relaxed... . I love the bits of the south that come across in your voice. ;)
Nice, lilting
If I understand the story the way you intended it, then the tension in your voice is well-suited to the tension the protagonist feels when thinking about his seductress. What doesn't quite fit is that your voice sounds like that of an older man. Would he still feel that kind of tension, I wonder? Or wistfulness? At the beginning it seemed like regret, but that didn't seem to be borne out by the rest of the story. Confusion, then?
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