First Sex of Life, It Was My Cousin!

Non Customary Writing

You're writing is different: not run-of-the-mill. Your story is as common as dirt; but the way you tell the story is better than most. Thank You.

Good story

Not run of the mill writing, but the story was good.

Great story please write some more

A lot of fun!

I really enjoyed this story, and your rather fractured English is a big part of my enjoyment. True, the characters are not developed very well---that is, there's no motivation, no lead-up, no literary "foreplay." The age difference between them makes her aggressiveness all the more surprising, but that's not a bad thing! Don't pay any attention to the commenters who are rude and crude!

good story

I can only guess you wrote this in English. It is a very tricky language and I am sure you know there are some grammar errors..
You should be very proud of your work and I amazed that you have the courage to post it here. I would offer my help but I am not sure I have the ability to tell you what is wrong even if I see the error. I suggest you see if you can contact someone through the editor's page who can and will help you improve. These services are free and the people volunteer to do this.
Keep on writing - you have a great start