Darren's Apartment Ch. 01

Keep writing

Very hot. Great anticipation.

Well then.

Damn. I want more.

next

ASAP

NEXT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!

Soooooo...the rest of the story...puleeeeezzzzzzzz!

Good start

Good start, can't wait for the next chapter: I am very curious about how the relationship between the siblings can grow six years later. Maybe they're gonna start a new family?

there is a huge-normous problem with this story.

too short!!!!

more coming soon, i hope!

Comments from the author

To those who enjoyed this story, thank you. I'm writing another one. I hope you'll like that too. To the 'Anonymous' user who's trolling this post, I'm really sorry you don't like the story. I'm sorry you don't like how I write. I do understand. I've read plenty of stories I haven't liked. However, none of them have made me so angry I was willing to repeatedly slam them. I guess I just can't get THAT invested in reacting to online amateur erotic fiction. I'm not sure why you are. I ask that you would please respect my wish that you abstain from now on, and I trust that you will be reasonable and make the right decision.

Interesting introductory chapter

I have nothing else to say.

Nice set-up...

...for the following chapters. I'm waiting for more...

I SUGGEST

IF you wrote GOOD STORIES you wouldn't get bad comments.
IF you kept the titles the same for all connected stories you wouldn't get bad comments.
IF you learned how to write you wouldn't get bad comments.
I suggest you stop writing if you can't take bad comments not everyone likes to read poorly written stories by writers that like to bash the readers. I suggest you keep your stories to yourself. if you didn't pay your friends for rave reviews you wouldn't get any.

Dear Anonymous

Funny how I'm really only getting bad reviews from you, Anonymous. Great screen name by the way. Very brave sounding. I'm still kind of amazed that you can get this upset because you read a story you didn't like. Which reminds me, to all those rave reviewers, did you get those checks I sent you? You're welcome.

Haters

I don't know why you got such negative comments from Anonymous but I thought this was good. Kinda quick but I can tel it is just a set-up for future installments and I'm excited to read them. Ignore the haters, probably just talentless trolls anyway, lol!

Well done Excellent Read

To the Anonymous

Grow your nuts and comment with a proper name so we know how good of a writer you are. I don't think any one ever takes notice of the comments posted by a Headless ghost. To me, this is a good start.