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Faking sleep
No one could sleep through that without drugs. Maybe next time she will "wake up" and tell him how much she loves it.
note please!
i don't have any problem with you writing whatever kind of story you want, and i think this story accomplished exactly what you wanted it to. but a lot of people are really negatively affected by nonconsensual stuff like this, so in the future you might want to put a warning note up front as a courtesy. otherwise somebody's going to slam you at some point, and i've seen people jump on stories like this with both feet if they don't feel like they were appropriately warned.
please proofread
I'm not a grammar nazi, but please proofread at least once before you post your stories. This story has great potential, but, he should have penetrated her deeply, not punctuated her deeply; and I have no idea exactly what this is supposed to mean: "I yanked at her night gown under it caught under her breasts". Having to stop during a story to decipher it is a real bummer. I look forward to seeing more of your work.
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Yeah, she was drugged- ye olde date rape drug... rohypnol! I think drugged = rape. I believe in free speech. You should post a warning up front like: Warning! Drugs & Rape!
AGREE
EVERY COMMENTS IS SO RIGHT.
Apologies for any ...
spelling errors.
And also for any offence caused.
However, my story is clearly posted in the incest section and is also tagged with asleep, forced, virgin, virginity and father daughter sex. It's very clear from the start that the person is completely out of it.
I have tried to edit this so that I could add a disclaimer but I'm unsure how to do this (if at all possible?)
On another note, I have listened to you about posting a disclaimer at the beginning and have done this for the three stories that I am submitting next.
Thanks for your comments, however, I don't result to posting negative comments on the stories I read, if I dislike them or spot errors. Instead, I just don't read them. :)
Thank you all of you who continue to read, comment (nicely) and email me & also to the 39 people who marked this story as one of their favourites!
AngieGS x
Not your cup of tea?? Don't read!
This story is categorized under "FORCED". "Forced = Rape" people...it just sounds nicer. So if you are reading ANY stories tagged with "Forced" be assured it's technically rape...don't be naive.
So, if Forced/Rape is NOT your cup of tea....MOVE ON!! And for your future reading...don't read 'Forced' stories if all you are going to do is critize that it was rape!!
I for one ENJOY reading Forced/Rape fictional stories! They're HOT!!
You Should Rename This Story "I"
Every single fucking sentence in it starts with "I."
That will kill any story no matter what it's about. This had a lot of potential. It wasn't bad, but the I's completely destroyed it. If you rewrite it, and take them all out, might not be half bad. How it is now... (Cringes)
Comments here are annoying
Hey, AngieGS, ignore those stupid comments. This story is HOT!
My cock is dripping with pre-cum from reading it, which is my highest compliment.
Was she secretly drugged
Make it credible by including the drugging details.
Because obviously she couldn't have remained
asleep after that cock pounding .
Now asshole annony is bitching about incest stories. Won't he ever
learn? Hey asshole I gave it a 5
are you going to write another part to this??
Loved this hope you make another part to it. Was a very hot story
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