by zenarcade
Great sex descriptions, but I was confused at the story setup. If it was all arranged between Jen and Ali, why the pretense of taking a call and leaving them in the club? It would have worked better for me if they had just arranged for Ali to fuck Tom while Jen watched from hiding. Or if either Ali or Tom didn't know what was going to happen.
As it was, it seemed rather silly to go through all the elaborate charade of pretending they didn't all know what was going to happen.
But the sex scenes were great! Keep up the good work--all puns intended!
But some of the dialog was over the top, not to be believed.
Plenty of sex, but not overly erotic. Things (sexual) moved too fast.