Point of Sustained, Potentially Tension Carried Quite Well
I liked how the wronged husband would not be deterred from exact, sordid truth despite evasions and bluffs by two cheaters. No violence but payback was obtained. Definite winner on flash story level. ****
But I think the ending was a little flat... I would have preferred it if he outrighted called her a whore "Well, if she's going to be a whore, you should pay her like one."
And I think if he made it clear that he wanted the photos for the divorce, after sending them to himself... that'd complete the BtB of it. At the moment, it's not incredibly clear what he will do, we're assuming.
Great writing and unique plot!! This story really has legs for another chapter. Maybe he could make enough on his wife's pussy to retire Without her.,,
Thanks, 5 stars. a fun little trip, and no jail for hubby. No doubt he kicked her to the curb when he had done humiliating her.
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Anonymous02/23/14
Yuck
Another mud bath. Once he got the admission and the evidence - all in front of his friends - there is no reason to continue the marriage. His wife is a pig. If she did this once she probably did it before and will do it again. She is not just his girlfriend. She is his life partner and future mother of his children. She has proven herself unfit for both titles and must be removed from those roles before she has a chance to do some real damage. Sadly, it is as simple as that - if she was an employee she'd be fired.
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Anonymous02/23/14
why not finish this incomplete story, the wife is now a whore, kick her to the curb
pieces of shit like her and the asshole belong in hell
Does Jim do The ultimate and get a divorce. She had sex at the spur of the moment, destroying her marriage, sleeping with mikes wife is not the place to go,since mike doesn't seem To care. So you left us hanging with an incomplete story. So. Please finish .. I would never give her another chance to cheat on me after she admitted what she did so nonchalantly . .
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Anonymous02/23/14
Actually I don't really like any of them.
I could see taking Martha and leaving the slut there but what ever.
Ok, definitely needs to fuck Martha in front of her then make her eat the cream pie.
Definitely made worse by the fact that she did things with the other guy that she wouldn't do with him.
Definitely should kick her to the curb with as little as he can legally get away with - unfortunately no-fault divorce laws protect cheaters, she should really get nothing.
That sucked. No tension, no drama and the dumb motherfucker didn't know she hung the horns on him til he saw her hair mussed? Not a well done story and please don't feel like you owe us more. This was quite enough.
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Anonymous02/23/14
Got what she deserves
She cheated on the spur of the moment, so will he. Makes a good example of her by referring to her as a call girl and, strikes while the iron is hot; with the other guys wife. Quick way of balancing the books... lol
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Anonymous02/23/14
finish it
needs and ending
by
Anonymous02/23/14
Brillient
Stories like this keep me checking into this site every day. All of us who had wives that cheated and divorced us and took all our hard earned money need these stories of revenge on the bitches. In real life the courts have us by the balls and there is nothing we can do. Years later we can relieve our hatred of women in tales such as this. Call it the Brotherhood of Once a Cuckold if you like, but we have made a stand to fight cheating wives past, present and future to the death! Stories like this inspire us and give us the grit we need. Five thusand stars!!!!!
This is a good start to a longer story. The protagonist has burned his wife and Mike in the worst possible without laying a finger on either of them. He also gets to fuck Mike's wife and follow through with a divorce later if he so wishes. And seeing that it's friends, neighbours and co workers at the party Tori and Mike won't have much of a reputation or job left in very short order.
...this story i s as bad as claimed. No man would react the way Jim did. Apart from that it is hard following the script. Nothing like this would actually happen in "real life" - wife and guest leaving for several hours, come back the way they did...and nothing but "low-IQ"-dialogues...
No thanks...not worthwhile continuing.
No black and white outcome, but we don't need to know what happens next. I'm sure we can imagine. Tell us in another chapter if you like. Although I suspect some readers still won't understand.
@Ego Trixi It may be the Author is not a Francis Macomber or a Longhorn07, but the half story has some humorous original idea. Yes an epilog had increased the story's value.
But the flow of the eternal cuck stories this story is a good anti boring alarm. Not only the comment section is readable.
Real life is strange, there's no telling what a person will do. There are a lot of possibilities.
Jimi boy may decide to make Viki a full time hooker
He may decide to ship her off toa life of slavery in Mexico
He could turn around after tapping Martha's ass and take a crowbar to Mikey's genitals
The story is only half baked, there are a lot of holes in the plot and Jim looks like he has some brains. I hope there's a sequel and he does something creatively nasty.
Never, not once have I read where the cheated husband, after being humiliated in front of a crowd, so humiliated his unfaithful wife. This is crying out for some kind of sequel. Jim is out for revenge. Those pictures could go to family and other friends. He's already been destroyed at the party; now he could totally destroy her. What would her reaction be? Why did she do it? Would she try to make amends? Would he accept any kind of rapprochement? Do they have kids? What would be their situation? You could take this a hundred different directions. You should go for it.
Liked the flow of the story and, I agree, it needs a stronger finish.
Thanks for a fine effort.
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Anonymous02/23/14
need another chapter
I say add another chapter. I for one would like to see what the writer decides to with the cheating pair. How the two who got cheated , how they handel the aftermath , do they stay married ?
Misread the ending and rated it 4*. I really liked the interplay between Hubby and Bull's wife Martha about Sweetie doing clean-up duty. Shoulda scored 5*.
Quibble is why Sweetie (or Bull Mike) would be SO blatant. Bull might have been drunkish, but Sweetie was designated driver! If it was an on-going affair, they woulda been more careful! If it was a 'new conquest', the seduction time-frame or opportunity is off! Was the ice still (mostly) ice?
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Anonymous02/24/14
Can't give it a good score
Until you put an ending to it. Seems that Jim is a tad miffed at his slut wife. Why give her any ammunition for the divorce? Just leave her at the party and go home. You might want to share attorneys with Martha to keep the cost down.
Interesting story. Not my usual choice for a story, but I saw the author's name and was curious about his writing and the comments he received. I see the usual poor me, my wife screwed around on me and/or took me for everything I had crowd chomping at the bit for another burn the bitch story.
Great ending. And I enjoy reading one-page stories. I laughed in a few places. :) The only thing I would suggest is editing for mechanical issues, primarily punctuation, before submitting a story. Nice, interesting, short LW story with a good pace.
Ya'll this is a fuck story site. thats what you just read. Why get all techy about all that author shit. It was in my opinion a good quick fuck story that had no fucking in it!!!Roflmao!! I loved it 49greg, you done good hey!!!
I was getting a little pissed until the end. That was a good ending. Hope there is a second part where Jim gets to fuck the other wife and then divorce his heartless Cunt wife. She wasn't drunk so she knew what she was doing. End of marriage period!
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Anonymous02/27/14
Weird but,
How about another chapter....bill
5
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Anonymous02/28/14
Liked it
good tale, wasn't sure where you were heading for a while, but got to admit it was quite clever to humiliate the bitch in front of everyone. The cheating husband needed more tho than just losing a cheque, hell, he could have cancelled it before it was cleared, a good kick in the balls would have been great.
You billed this story as being about a wife doing something out of character on the spur of the moment. Given that, the story is entirely unbelievable without some more information about why she did what she did. She was relatively sober, so there is no way she could have thought she could get away with the long absence. One must surmise that she is tired of her marriage and this is a guaranteed way out.
Also, taking the other wife home diminished the perception of the husband taking the high road. It would have been better without that.
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Anonymous03/22/14
missing
parts missing, was this the first time, why this happened. money is not a
good revenge. tale not finished.
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Anonymous04/18/14
She's now a whore
And that was beautiful! Take her back, put her in a spare bedroom, never touch her but whore her out.
Leaving this story supposedly unfinished worked very well, just look at the amount of comments. If a story can cause you to think, bring a reaction, the jobs done.
This is wonderfully told, clear and direct, nothing flowery and explaining the characters feelings precisely.
Why she cheated, why Jim reacted the way he did and what will he do with her and the pictures? We may never know, but we'll have fun imagining.
Thanks.
English
Point of Sustained, Potentially Tension Carried Quite Well
I liked how the wronged husband would not be deterred from exact, sordid truth despite evasions and bluffs by two cheaters. No violence but payback was obtained. Definite winner on flash story level. ****
Cool
That was different. Did not see that cumming!
Good story....
But I think the ending was a little flat... I would have preferred it if he outrighted called her a whore "Well, if she's going to be a whore, you should pay her like one."
And I think if he made it clear that he wanted the photos for the divorce, after sending them to himself... that'd complete the BtB of it. At the moment, it's not incredibly clear what he will do, we're assuming.
Otherwise, it's a good flash story.
Interesting reaction with little depth to the story.
Not Bad
Kind of funny, actually. I hope he sent the pictures to her family. That would really be funny. Ha Ha
LOL
Good flash story. I like characters who did gold from shit, who change a bad situation to better life circumtansis.
Nice flash story
But the guy she fucked paid not her;).
Brilliant !
Great writing and unique plot!! This story really has legs for another chapter. Maybe he could make enough on his wife's pussy to retire Without her.,,
A little awkward at times.
Good burn...
Thanks, 5 stars. a fun little trip, and no jail for hubby. No doubt he kicked her to the curb when he had done humiliating her.
Yuck
Another mud bath. Once he got the admission and the evidence - all in front of his friends - there is no reason to continue the marriage. His wife is a pig. If she did this once she probably did it before and will do it again. She is not just his girlfriend. She is his life partner and future mother of his children. She has proven herself unfit for both titles and must be removed from those roles before she has a chance to do some real damage. Sadly, it is as simple as that - if she was an employee she'd be fired.
why not finish this incomplete story, the wife is now a whore, kick her to the curb
pieces of shit like her and the asshole belong in hell
WHEN ONE WANTS PAYBACK
and doesn't mean back pay. TK U MLJ LV NV
So , finish the story.
Does Jim do The ultimate and get a divorce. She had sex at the spur of the moment, destroying her marriage, sleeping with mikes wife is not the place to go,since mike doesn't seem To care. So you left us hanging with an incomplete story. So. Please finish .. I would never give her another chance to cheat on me after she admitted what she did so nonchalantly . .
Actually I don't really like any of them.
I could see taking Martha and leaving the slut there but what ever.
Definitely Cries Out For More!
Ok, definitely needs to fuck Martha in front of her then make her eat the cream pie.
Definitely made worse by the fact that she did things with the other guy that she wouldn't do with him.
Definitely should kick her to the curb with as little as he can legally get away with - unfortunately no-fault divorce laws protect cheaters, she should really get nothing.
waste of time
That sucked. No tension, no drama and the dumb motherfucker didn't know she hung the horns on him til he saw her hair mussed? Not a well done story and please don't feel like you owe us more. This was quite enough.
Got what she deserves
She cheated on the spur of the moment, so will he. Makes a good example of her by referring to her as a call girl and, strikes while the iron is hot; with the other guys wife. Quick way of balancing the books... lol
finish it
needs and ending
Brillient
Stories like this keep me checking into this site every day. All of us who had wives that cheated and divorced us and took all our hard earned money need these stories of revenge on the bitches. In real life the courts have us by the balls and there is nothing we can do. Years later we can relieve our hatred of women in tales such as this. Call it the Brotherhood of Once a Cuckold if you like, but we have made a stand to fight cheating wives past, present and future to the death! Stories like this inspire us and give us the grit we need. Five thusand stars!!!!!
Please,
No more like this.
Idiots who give lousy feedback
This is a good start to a longer story. The protagonist has burned his wife and Mike in the worst possible without laying a finger on either of them. He also gets to fuck Mike's wife and follow through with a divorce later if he so wishes. And seeing that it's friends, neighbours and co workers at the party Tori and Mike won't have much of a reputation or job left in very short order.
No lousy feedback...
...this story i s as bad as claimed. No man would react the way Jim did. Apart from that it is hard following the script. Nothing like this would actually happen in "real life" - wife and guest leaving for several hours, come back the way they did...and nothing but "low-IQ"-dialogues...
No thanks...not worthwhile continuing.
A shade of grey
No black and white outcome, but we don't need to know what happens next. I'm sure we can imagine. Tell us in another chapter if you like. Although I suspect some readers still won't understand.
An epilog should be written..........
@Ego Trixi It may be the Author is not a Francis Macomber or a Longhorn07, but the half story has some humorous original idea. Yes an epilog had increased the story's value.
But the flow of the eternal cuck stories this story is a good anti boring alarm. Not only the comment section is readable.
Real Life?
@EgoTrixie
Real life is strange, there's no telling what a person will do. There are a lot of possibilities.
Jimi boy may decide to make Viki a full time hooker
He may decide to ship her off toa life of slavery in Mexico
He could turn around after tapping Martha's ass and take a crowbar to Mikey's genitals
The story is only half baked, there are a lot of holes in the plot and Jim looks like he has some brains. I hope there's a sequel and he does something creatively nasty.
could happen
A friend of mine had an uncle that walked in on his wife cheating with another man, he handed the guy $2 and told him to go get something better.
New and original!
Never, not once have I read where the cheated husband, after being humiliated in front of a crowd, so humiliated his unfaithful wife. This is crying out for some kind of sequel. Jim is out for revenge. Those pictures could go to family and other friends. He's already been destroyed at the party; now he could totally destroy her. What would her reaction be? Why did she do it? Would she try to make amends? Would he accept any kind of rapprochement? Do they have kids? What would be their situation? You could take this a hundred different directions. You should go for it.
It needs a finish
Liked the flow of the story and, I agree, it needs a stronger finish.
Thanks for a fine effort.
need another chapter
I say add another chapter. I for one would like to see what the writer decides to with the cheating pair. How the two who got cheated , how they handel the aftermath , do they stay married ?
Ha, Ha, Ha
@Tw0Cr0ws LOL! I hope he divorced her.......
Oops
Misread the ending and rated it 4*. I really liked the interplay between Hubby and Bull's wife Martha about Sweetie doing clean-up duty. Shoulda scored 5*.
Quibble is why Sweetie (or Bull Mike) would be SO blatant. Bull might have been drunkish, but Sweetie was designated driver! If it was an on-going affair, they woulda been more careful! If it was a 'new conquest', the seduction time-frame or opportunity is off! Was the ice still (mostly) ice?
Can't give it a good score
Until you put an ending to it. Seems that Jim is a tad miffed at his slut wife. Why give her any ammunition for the divorce? Just leave her at the party and go home. You might want to share attorneys with Martha to keep the cost down.
Well that is some story. I liked it....... *****
Another ending would have been to wishy washy. I think Tori is in for a very long night.
Interesting story. Not my usual choice for a story, but I saw the author's name and was curious about his writing and the comments he received. I see the usual poor me, my wife screwed around on me and/or took me for everything I had crowd chomping at the bit for another burn the bitch story.
Great ending. And I enjoy reading one-page stories. I laughed in a few places. :) The only thing I would suggest is editing for mechanical issues, primarily punctuation, before submitting a story. Nice, interesting, short LW story with a good pace.
Who the fuck cares about an ending.
Ya'll this is a fuck story site. thats what you just read. Why get all techy about all that author shit. It was in my opinion a good quick fuck story that had no fucking in it!!!Roflmao!! I loved it 49greg, you done good hey!!!
It's**
A read.
Spectacular!!! As far as revenge goes, that was a good one. Of course, this story ends in divorce court, but who cares. Nicely done!!!!
A Solid Five
A good story line, well written with a nice twist at the end.
JUST WAITING FOR NEXT CHAPTER??????
Good story, but needs another Chapter to end this story?? Husband needs to Fuck Martha twice &BJ to make it even???
Good story
I was getting a little pissed until the end. That was a good ending. Hope there is a second part where Jim gets to fuck the other wife and then divorce his heartless Cunt wife. She wasn't drunk so she knew what she was doing. End of marriage period!
Weird but,
How about another chapter....bill
5
Liked it
good tale, wasn't sure where you were heading for a while, but got to admit it was quite clever to humiliate the bitch in front of everyone. The cheating husband needed more tho than just losing a cheque, hell, he could have cancelled it before it was cleared, a good kick in the balls would have been great.
Sequel
Please.
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ESPECIALLY KENNY9990 & HIS STUPID CUCKY STORY
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Nice Payback
Good non-violent revenge. Would be interesting to see how the wife responds in the morning. Gotta think divorce on the horizon!
Inquiring Minds Want to Know
You billed this story as being about a wife doing something out of character on the spur of the moment. Given that, the story is entirely unbelievable without some more information about why she did what she did. She was relatively sober, so there is no way she could have thought she could get away with the long absence. One must surmise that she is tired of her marriage and this is a guaranteed way out.
Also, taking the other wife home diminished the perception of the husband taking the high road. It would have been better without that.
missing
parts missing, was this the first time, why this happened. money is not a
good revenge. tale not finished.
She's now a whore
And that was beautiful! Take her back, put her in a spare bedroom, never touch her but whore her out.
unfinished
Leaving this story supposedly unfinished worked very well, just look at the amount of comments. If a story can cause you to think, bring a reaction, the jobs done.
This is wonderfully told, clear and direct, nothing flowery and explaining the characters feelings precisely.
Why she cheated, why Jim reacted the way he did and what will he do with her and the pictures? We may never know, but we'll have fun imagining.
Thanks.
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