That didn't even get me interested to read more, it was far too short to get a feel for either one of them, if you post more make them longer, something to keep your reader interested. The thing I hate most about multi part stories is when the writer did as you just did and not even give us a full page or its only one page in length.
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Anonymous02/26/14
U need to spice it up some more but it good for a start
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Anonymous04/06/14
Good
I just started reading eroticas and I think you've got a good start (I play violin myself) but I definitely think it could get "hotter" even before anything happens. More of HER reaction to his touch..
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That didn't even get me interested to read more, it was far too short to get a feel for either one of them, if you post more make them longer, something to keep your reader interested. The thing I hate most about multi part stories is when the writer did as you just did and not even give us a full page or its only one page in length.
U need to spice it up some more but it good for a start
Good
I just started reading eroticas and I think you've got a good start (I play violin myself) but I definitely think it could get "hotter" even before anything happens. More of HER reaction to his touch..
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