Love this story! We have a married couple who do a bit of public nudity and reference a great BJ on the way home in the car. I disagree with some of the comments, all that has occurred is a H/W enjoying one another. Granted she told a story and left us hanging, but the story fit the article. Love the mystery, if this continues (I say if because leaving it hanging is an interesting choice too) I will look froward to reading it, Well done!
. . . and women have been known to be both quixotic and unpredictable. If I were married to a woman like that I think my erection would certainly last until next month and I wouldn't mind cleaning the ceiling every time I had to pee.
was over the top. I liked Hubby's comment re if Robert was real, he was fucked and so was his wife. Did he mean literally or figuratively? Extremely well-written.
After over hearing his wife's conversation with her sister on how to spice up a marriage. The husband should either turn up at the restaurant, or a friend / colleagues sees her with another man. So our husband may want to invent a young woman he has meet through work, and that he will be having business lunches with her.
The husband can see how the wife reacts to his announcement of another lunch date !
The premise is wonderful. The execution is spotty! Hubby overhearing the 'set-up' phone conversation spoils a lot of it! It DOES allow Sweetie to go a lot faster in setting up a 'rival' (which is good in keeping words and reading time down, but terrible in reducing reader AND Hubby doubt!)
I would prefer that Rival be introduced more gradually and more plausibly (a vendor who goes by Sweetie's work every two weeks and she spots him at the diner) and has a bit more 'date' opportunity than Hubby!
The skirt removal was WAY over the top, and Hubby cutting out the crotch of her pantyhose was ludicrous. Walking out that way was a glaring challenge to never be allowed in that facility again! Reigniting the spark is ONE thing, torching Atlanta is another! Work your way up to it ... where can Sweetie go NEXT month? Fuck a donkey in church?
This could turn into an interesting series. I agree with SplendidSpunk. Don't let the constant negative critiques in LW forum keep you from writing and sharing your fantasies. Because, they are just that, fantasies and stories. How many married couples are just like these two, caught in the drab rut of existence, too busy in making a living to live? Please carry on, and from your bio, you've not posted but about once a year. Please keep this going and don't make us wait.
Excellent word usage and grammar. You can write intelligently! 5 *'s
English
too short
needed more.
Is Robert real? I don't know and I don't much care. You needed to do more to draw me and other readers in enough to care.
Great story
Great story.I hope there is more to come.
I really, really hope Robert is a myth.
But let's be fair, your couple isn't in a rut after 20 years of marriage, they've been in a rut since their first year.
So Good
Love this story! We have a married couple who do a bit of public nudity and reference a great BJ on the way home in the car. I disagree with some of the comments, all that has occurred is a H/W enjoying one another. Granted she told a story and left us hanging, but the story fit the article. Love the mystery, if this continues (I say if because leaving it hanging is an interesting choice too) I will look froward to reading it, Well done!
Can't wait....
Looking forward to your next installment!
Fun story . . .
. . . and women have been known to be both quixotic and unpredictable. If I were married to a woman like that I think my erection would certainly last until next month and I wouldn't mind cleaning the ceiling every time I had to pee.
Her state of undress in the restaurant
was over the top. I liked Hubby's comment re if Robert was real, he was fucked and so was his wife. Did he mean literally or figuratively? Extremely well-written.
Sin on the Wife....
After over hearing his wife's conversation with her sister on how to spice up a marriage. The husband should either turn up at the restaurant, or a friend / colleagues sees her with another man. So our husband may want to invent a young woman he has meet through work, and that he will be having business lunches with her.
The husband can see how the wife reacts to his announcement of another lunch date !
Interesting Start
The premise is wonderful. The execution is spotty! Hubby overhearing the 'set-up' phone conversation spoils a lot of it! It DOES allow Sweetie to go a lot faster in setting up a 'rival' (which is good in keeping words and reading time down, but terrible in reducing reader AND Hubby doubt!)
I would prefer that Rival be introduced more gradually and more plausibly (a vendor who goes by Sweetie's work every two weeks and she spots him at the diner) and has a bit more 'date' opportunity than Hubby!
The skirt removal was WAY over the top, and Hubby cutting out the crotch of her pantyhose was ludicrous. Walking out that way was a glaring challenge to never be allowed in that facility again! Reigniting the spark is ONE thing, torching Atlanta is another! Work your way up to it ... where can Sweetie go NEXT month? Fuck a donkey in church?
Can't wait until next part..
This could turn into an interesting series. I agree with SplendidSpunk. Don't let the constant negative critiques in LW forum keep you from writing and sharing your fantasies. Because, they are just that, fantasies and stories. How many married couples are just like these two, caught in the drab rut of existence, too busy in making a living to live? Please carry on, and from your bio, you've not posted but about once a year. Please keep this going and don't make us wait.
Excellent word usage and grammar. You can write intelligently! 5 *'s
Reserve my vote for the next and final chapter?
You've got some holes and some possibilities. Not badly written but the lack of some detail is a problem. We'll see.
Good story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Let's see what happens next months ;)
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