There is potential here, but it's too choppy. It makes reading difficult.
Really a good start, could have given it four stars but you left me hanging at the end so only three stars
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Another abrupt ending.
There is potential here, but it's too choppy. It makes reading difficult.
Realy good start
Really a good start, could have given it four stars but you left me hanging at the end so only three stars
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