Family is Not Blood Ch. 02

Once a cuckold always a cuckold

apply to this wimp. A 3 years affair still does not stop him from taking back a cheating wife with a bastard.From now on you get a 1 from an unromantic wimp story.

Oh Dear Annony!! Poor dear Annony, you're not un romantic baby

you're a ass hole

story sliding down the outhouse hole

oh she changed. Cheaters are cheaters because of personality defects, mental or emotional. Marry a cheater and simply wait around til they cheat again. This woman is more than defective, she is vile. If the child is endangered have the child removed, don't play supercop to protect trash.

editor . . .

You need to get an editor. Biggest of the many errors is that you keep switching the sex of Cathy's child.

Franciszka and little Freddie both names for the child

Franciszka and little Freddie both names for the child, next Chapter explains. Sorry about not making that clear.

Good Read***

Much better than I thought it would be. Thanks for sharing.

Thanks for the effort.

As if the kid didn't have enough problems

apparently, it's a hermaphrodite:

"Little Freddie has done nothing wrong, and HIS mother, my ex-wife who cheated on me and had this child with another man, has been doing all she can to raise and protect her DAUGHTER."

Franciszka and little Freddie both names for the child Franciszka and little Freddie both names for the child, next Chapter explains. Sorry about not making that clear.

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA OMFG you wanker, you called it a son and daughter in the same damn paragraph, YOU aren't clear on the sex of the child either. Also POST your shit where it belongs in LW and face the music there you coward. Stop spreading this shit!

Tough

Mój Boże! Zasnąłem.

More of your ridiculous wank!

Hate your writting. Hey try reading it yourself you woman hating idiot.

Most great writers are not English majors.

Talent without editing is awkward, confusing, and makes for difficult reading. But editing without talent or wit is just well composed properly spelled boredom. You can hire editing, but you can't hire wit or imagination. The writing needs editing, but the story shows good wit and imagination. I hope you continue. And yes, Loving Wives is where this should be. Damn the torpedoes! Words will never hurt you, a lot.

You need editing, but,,,,,

You write a very interesting story which suggests that you come from a different world than most of the commentator... Keep it up, I enjoy ideas and dialogue.

Shit story

Family is blood. Were your family actually worth one shit and raised you properly, you would understand that. Sad that mongrels like you think that this kind of thing is acceptable nowadays.