More tender and more loving. These two have a good future ahead of them.
Get an editor, BadWriter. Too many mistakes in both chapters.
Gave it a +2 because it was better than your last story, but still just a fuck and suck story nothing more.
Need another chapter, maybe pull in one of Abby's girlfriends.
Gawd, quit using the word spunk. Ugh!
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More tender and more loving.
These two have a good future ahead of them.
You have the perfect user name
Get an editor, BadWriter. Too many mistakes in both chapters.
+2 Better
Gave it a +2 because it was better than your last story, but still just a fuck and suck story nothing more.
Keep writing
Need another chapter, maybe pull in one of Abby's girlfriends.
Gawd, quit using the word spunk. Ugh!
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