Danielle's Transformation

Oh no. What's going to happen next?

please continue ,cant wait to find out more

MORE PLS

this the making of very good story yes may be good starte for lim to be femed ps more yours leann5red

Good start but made a wrong turn.

You should stay more realistic. Describe the feelings when first passing as woman and thrill of getting guys hard for you.

Dumber than a rock

That about describes it.

So WHAT might be NEXT?

He's in chains and gets a cock rammed up his ass. Boy, real tension there. Nobody's EVER done that in a CD story before! And maybe the guy will call his schlong "Big Ben" or something. Real clever stuff here, gang!

Why did you stop, did you need time to jerk off?

Stop while ahead

You had the makings of a fantastic story there, and so I hope you can somehow pull this off, but at this point it looks like you quickly spun out of control.

Please stop

Four lines into the story and you used the lamest most trite of tg fiction clichés. And it got no better from there.

Cliff Notes

Hi.
I put on a dress.
I got taken to a dungeon.
I got fucked in the ass.
So I must be a girl now.
The end.

Disappointing

I come here to read good stories to jack off to
Not to read jackoff stories that rehash the same old shit.
If you can't be any more creative than this, why bother?

Very personal

Sissy, you have been so shy and so reclusive all your life. You are about to cede your anal virginity. Unwillingly, at that. Never mind what others say about you. They too had theirs ripped out long ago. Now it's your turn to describe your innermost fears.

There are countless women out here eager to hear YOUR version of YOUR first time.

Please continue!

First try, eh?

I think if you cannot do any better than this you might want to re-think what you're doing with is. And if you can't do that, maybe you ought to forget it.

Yes, it's my first try at this.

Yes people, it is my first try at writing a story. I do appreciate the comments, both positive and negative. I hope to get much better at this so please bare with me as I try to improve my writing abilities. Thank you again for the comments.

And no, you won't get any better!

You tried. Keep trying. But it won't work. You either have it or you don't.

you keep writing doll!!

ignore all the negative comments...this is a fine story, and I am glad you wrote part 2.....keep going GF!

nice

nice story, better than I do.. .. keep going

chin up

There is nothing wrong with this as an introductory chapter. Not sure why all the negativity. Try to ignore the jerks and just have fun with the process of creation.