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ametuer
too short and just poor
Part 2
Did you read the first part of the story? Sorry you didn't like it. I'll be sure to make stories longer next time. I continued because people liked the first part. I guess I took it in a "poor" direction.
1 & 2
I read both chapters, very short but a nice stroke story for those looking for a quick turn on. On occasion it's nice to just get super wet, super fast, and this did it!
This was obviously not written to be an epic romance, but with a little more character development and a back story it could be better.
More
Want to find out what happens
Very erotic!
But still too short!
I'll wait for the next chapter.
4*
Great Story
You've prepared a good foundation for a very erotic story with many hints so far of domination and so please make the next chapters longer with more domination by the employee of the manager. You left off with the implication that the employee may take control as she hinted that she questioned why the manager had the job when she was in control. Longer with the employee really taking control of the manager and making her really do erotic things, maybe some humiliating actions.
Good job so far but please longer and many more chapters...This could be a book.
Can't Wait for Chapter 4!
Then begins the full domination by Laura - break out the ropes, cuffs and whips and put up the St. Andrew's Cross and Bondage Horse! Just kidding (well, maybe not....) but do make the next chapter and any that follow somewhat longer. Appreciate both your writing style and attention to detail thus far - keep up the good effort!
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