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by GuiltyPleasure03/05/14

Heartbreaking......

....and heart felt. The rhyming occurs without jarring. It's very difficult to write rhyme into emotional poetry without lightening the mood, Mutt manages t here. Well done. Recommended.

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by Angeline03/05/14

I agree with Tess

This is so heartfelt, spare but raw and its simplicity lends to the elegiac tone.

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by butters03/05/14

oh...

*cries*

exceptional

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by twelveoone03/06/14

New readers

after done reading, notice the breakout from the I in the front of the line - the structure change - very well done
5ed

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by UnderYourSpell04/14/14

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A ballad form that conveys heartbreak so poignantly ........ well done!

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