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Beauty Sleep

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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone03/06/14

OK a crit

Lead lines 1,2 good, couldn't ask for anything better, Stanza 1 excellent. The pacing as a whole, very good
S4 and 5 drag a bit, but it is an almost needed lull, before the finality at the end.
In short, well done
def 5
but this is not a story, more a comedy routine, some of your fans may object to that, but for the record, I prefer comedy routines

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by Anonymous03/12/14

Don't give up the day job.

Poetry isn't your thing.

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by Magnetron03/16/14

@ Anonymous

Thanks for the 1 star rating and putting so much intellectual thought into your "assessment" of my writing skills and originality of content based on one poem out of 60+ submitted.

LOL

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