Equivalence

Lovely poem

and congrats on a well-deserved E!

Synchronicity?

I am currently reading an interpretation of a series of poems that views them from a Buddhist perspective, so this poem was quite striking to me. I like the spare and simple exposition. I personally think it might be better without the last line, which seems superfluous, but an excellent read in any case.

The Reader

smiles too : 5-ed !

Very nicely done

Very nicely done but something of a cliche - hence somewhat light weight.

I have seen much better poems from you.

I don't know what the criteria are for an "E" but originality certainly has to be one.

As usual, you pack a lot into a small space.

The syntax of the last 3 lines felt off when I first read the poem, but the more I thought about, it actually makes the poem better.